killua is loser and Zoro is ugly
Okay for starters i do not think killua is a loser nor do i think that zoro is ugly like i would've to be dumb to think that, i love both of them but i needed your attention sorry
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Sooo I just came out with the first chapter of a book I have been working on it called "the all seeing eyes"
Here is the link :
https://www.quotev.com/story/13978049/The-all-seeing-eyesGenre : supernatural, mystery
Summary :
What would you do if you found a boy covered in bruises on you're doorstep?
Would you ask him if he's okay?
Or would you ask him where his parents are?
Or maybe even call you're neighbor?
Well I did none of these and i'm damn glad I didn't.
Abigail was you're normal office worker with a bit of a temper but that all changed when she found a boy on her doorstep.
So if you're interested check it out.
Again sorry if any of you are still offended by the statement I made earlier i did not mean it
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Bestie, me and you were about to fight-
But it looks really good. I'm gonna be waiting for chapter 2
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03 07,2021
Grammar. Punctuation. Capitals and names.
Consistency with italics.
The plot starts nicely but your execution of written language is in need of a proof reader with a solid knowledge of written English. Sadly the grammatical errors makes reading awkward.
Constructive criticism only here. Again, the plot seems interesting
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05 07,2021
Excuse me? Zoro isnt ugly..? But I respect your opinion. And so far, this is amazing, you did so well.
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05 07,2021
When you don't watch anime that much
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11 07,2021
ngl at first i thought you found a book you liked and came to promote it cuz it was jus that good and i loved the summary so i was gonna read and i saw you wrote it- like sis wow that's amazing. i cant wait to see how it'll go ^^
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05 07,2021
almost got me on the first half ngl
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05 07,2021
