deb_back
: HAHAHA STOP IT BRO! YOU LOSE YOUR CHANCE ALREADY! THE BUS IS ALREADY DEPARTED TO KYLO ╮(￣▽￣)╭
Lingz
: I like how the author gave a rationale to why the workers were treating mc so we'll even though it is quite obv she isn't the daughter. It explains the actions of the workers quite well.
~spoilers up to ch13 ahead~
The only thing I am a bit urked about is the actions of the mc. It seems she wants revenge for the original daughter, yet is taking no actions to tattletale, and keeps worrying about the duke thinking that she isnt the actual daughter. She then proceeds to flee the mansion after thinking the duke isn't going to accept her, and goes to find the abusers by herself? Like what was she doing?
I'm actually not saying that her actions are illogical. Even if it is illogical, since mc is an actual child, it can be shown as her naivety. However the author isn't conveying the mc's thoughts at all.
If I were to craft the story about the mc while maintaining the plot from ch1-13 so far, I would do this:
- mc wants to seek revenge for the original daughter, therefore she steals the keepsake and goes to the duke
- however due to the mistreatment she has experienced and her guilt of impersonating her best friend, she is extremely scared of the duke not believing her words, and would instead accuse her of stealing the keepsake.
- Therefore she decides to lay low for now, since if the daughter exists, her abuser wouldn't be able to send anyone impersonating the real daughter
- after she misunderstood the duke, thinking that he knows that she isn't the real daughter and about to kick her out, she panics and tries to think of another way to get revenge.
- she thinks about how the abusers were going to the imperial ball, and thinks maybe she can get her revenge by announcing the misdeeds of the abusers about killing the duke's daughter in front of everyone.
- (honestly it's pretty hard to justify why tf she went to the abusers but this is the best my small brain can do. Maybe I would use cartoonish drawings to show the naivety of the plan, implying that this plan was likely not going to be feasible)
- but before she could even start, her plan fails when she was blocked outside the venue. She tries to get in by luring the guards away, telling them to go find the abuser, the only person she knew was at the ball, but it backfires on her
Lol anyways that's what I would do. Spent way too long typing this out haha
Feeds
~spoilers up to ch13 ahead~
The only thing I am a bit urked about is the actions of the mc. It seems she wants revenge for the original daughter, yet is taking no actions to tattletale, and keeps worrying about the duke thinking that she isnt the actual daughter. She then proceeds to flee the mansion after thinking the duke isn't going to accept her, and goes to find the abusers by herself? Like what was she doing?
I'm actually not saying that her actions are illogical. Even if it is illogical, since mc is an actual child, it can be shown as her naivety. However the author isn't conveying the mc's thoughts at all.
If I were to craft the story about the mc while maintaining the plot from ch1-13 so far, I would do this:
- mc wants to seek revenge for the original daughter, therefore she steals the keepsake and goes to the duke
- however due to the mistreatment she has experienced and her guilt of impersonating her best friend, she is extremely scared of the duke not believing her words, and would instead accuse her of stealing the keepsake.
- Therefore she decides to lay low for now, since if the daughter exists, her abuser wouldn't be able to send anyone impersonating the real daughter
- after she misunderstood the duke, thinking that he knows that she isn't the real daughter and about to kick her out, she panics and tries to think of another way to get revenge.
- she thinks about how the abusers were going to the imperial ball, and thinks maybe she can get her revenge by announcing the misdeeds of the abusers about killing the duke's daughter in front of everyone.
- (honestly it's pretty hard to justify why tf she went to the abusers but this is the best my small brain can do. Maybe I would use cartoonish drawings to show the naivety of the plan, implying that this plan was likely not going to be feasible)
- but before she could even start, her plan fails when she was blocked outside the venue. She tries to get in by luring the guards away, telling them to go find the abuser, the only person she knew was at the ball, but it backfires on her
Lol anyways that's what I would do. Spent way too long typing this out haha