Charlington
: This is what I am looking for drama make it juicy
Castors_Hubby
: Yeah, I think this is a future DNF. The author doesn't even know what he wants and the story progresses too quickly and not quickly enough at the same time. There is not enough world building, and the tiny amount that there is doesn't even justify 16 chapters. He is quickly becoming a Gary Stu.
Feeds