well shit's manga / #Isekai(2)

I see the author’s vision but the execution was way too janky and the characters too flat. the slap stick comedy and extremeness of everything was funny though, felt like author was doing a parody LMAO. just take it with a grain of salt and imagine youre watching a hilarious speedrun of a highschool play head empty!!! Wee!!! Usually i love these kind of light and silly stories but i was nawt feeling the characters lol author was having a fun time doing this they said fuck the plot we’re doing camp!!! And good for them!

The premise was there but the execution is a bit messy? The story telling feels way too vague and it goes too fast at certain times. Like at by chapter 15+ i feel like i should know the gist of whats happening and the overarching plot but i genuinely have no clue..? Like the plot isnt plottingdhdjj especially with how random the info dumping is? Its okay to info dump if theres a base line the readers can connect and work with but this is just so out of place and so sudden with no background info its so hard to get attached to the world building and characters bc of it and the abruptness in the way the panel changes scene is so awkward and stiff. It’d be fine if the dialogue and character exposition isnt awkward but it is and that makes the flow rlly disjointed and ? Bland? Like the mc’s motivations and personality is so wishy washy? Given the situation lol like there was no transition chapter of the mc trying to accept that the game is now his actual reality. It just feels wonky??? And the ml, as much as i get where hes coming from, his chemistry with the mc is non existent? Like i genuinely could care less about him. Author could hve had them have a BIT more sexual tension (the sex scenes dont count bc of how stiff it is lol) like idk give me some indescribable yearning glances, subtle touches, with panels emphasizing the pining IDK?? theyre lowkey like exes rn and i usually LOVE that trope but this. This feels so off for some reason lol the chemistry isnt there the plot is moving all over the place and the characters’ motivation and deprh dont feel solid at all. It feels like no one beta read the story before publishing almost? And mc’s character isnt likable at awllll like usually characters like him, selfish, self serving and self sacrificial bastards are my bread and butter (sqq kdj muah) but this.. yeah im not feeling him LMAO he just feels too clueless at times . Oh well its a head empty type of read anyway, so its okay. Honestly i would much rather read about mc and his vassals instead of the ml lol