ReviewRaptor's manga / #wtf just happened?(293)

The writing is absolutely lackluster. The author knows the story but does not explain it in even so much as the first chapter, you're just thrown random TINY bits of info and that's it, you're supposed to know wtf just happened and it sufficing as an adequate information to understand the setting. This is VERY shit writing and it's honestly making me loose all interest. Not sure if it'll get better later on (I heavily doubt it tho) but I for one will not bother reading this.

With the white-hair dude having SUCH a shit personality and their interaction at the very start already being SO weird, I'll not even bother with this.

It's been 18 chapters now and I finally realize why I cannot stand the MC: Among his many writing flaws such as randomness in chucking in mental problems or issues without any clear reason (the strangling bullshit) he also is literally like a fucking cat. That explains perfectly why he's so obnoxious at many times. It's certainly not the main issue i have with his character, but it sure plays a role. XD But anyway, REVIEW TIME: I honestly do not like this comic. I HEAVILY dislike the randomness of throwing in stuff and never addressing the root of it (because that strangling bs DOES warrant a strong reasoning besides 'born on streets' and 'shitty upbringing by criminal') and then kinda just ignoring it was a thing. Just like he ignored the children that will likely also be pushed into crime and prostitution despite him having a LITERAL instant-solving tool right next to him now; the prosecutor. (And the comic explained it away by saying; "I don't care, me feeling uncomfy in my new home is more important than worrying about saving children that are starved, abused and made to do things such as crimes." Just....wtf?) It also doesn't sit well with me that the prosecutor blamed himself for offending the MC when it was very clearly a YOU-problem for the MC. Getting offended by that situation to THAT degree was definitely a you-problem. Gives Karen-vibes tbh. I know what the story was going for, but the comic doesn't really do a good job with it all. I have no idea if the novel is better but I dare say it likely is. Maybe even more detailed since, as we all know, these comics LOVE to ignore important details in writing which make a story work or simply ruin it all. This comic also seems to really chuck in trauma-based behavior just to have it there rather than it being realistically portrayed as good as possible. That reflects in his very sudden and random possessiveness/entitlement to a dregree but more so in the strangling bs, that literally made zero sense except being a literal psychopath. Which the MC is not, so yeah. :/ As I really do not care for the MC and the prosecutor isn't really interesting either (he comes across as very empty and shallow, kinda like a McGuyver episode tool that does something as needed in that very moment), I have no desire to read more. Not even to see how they get together tbh. It's just not interesting to me in any way, it even has more minus points in my books than anything. Which is sad, since the core story is incredibly interesting, just the execution is really not done well. :/ This is likely a case by case thing, so read it for yourselves to see if this all is something you too would be bothered by. I do believe those that like annoying cat people/obnoxious-type tsundere/literal asshole-type cat behavior (not interaction triggered one!) will like this more than other people, based on how he behaves (he really is a literal cat, randomly getting pissed on his own accord - this is NOT cute in animals or humans, btw). It's not my thing, but many people can surely like it. Again; this really depends on taste.

First of all: Happy reading for those who do not care for a better base plot than "i randomly wanna help you all of a sudden, but you gotta let me fuck you". I honestly cannot stand this kinda weird, random porn logic in plots. XD I TRIED reading this but honestly this just isn't appealing in any way. Even the art is just on an okay level for my standards. But all in all it's the story itself that I have an issue with, not the art. The story tries to go for seriousness with a workplace shennanigans plot, then throws in the most ridiculous porn plot to justify getting the characters into a relationship (literally at random btw), neither character is appealing or interesting and there is literally nothing within the introduction chapters that actually makes me want to keep reading. For me this failed on every front except the grammar or fluent storytelling (little that there is). Which is not enough to keep me here. Tiven the plot is literally just a basic porn plot with wannabe seriousness thrown in to bait you, I really see zero appeal for me here. It could be a nice page flipper for horny moments if people are looking for that, but this is very empty and dry in every way for me. Sadly. This likely depends on personal taste and standards for writing/story setups, so I suppose the usual applies; give it a shot, but I warned you.

This is a review, so be warned to click away if you cannot stand critique: As adorable as this is and as lovely as the base story is; the writing isn't good. Feelings do not seem to settle or come to be as well as they should and the absolutely random and sudden shift from antsy fanboy to suddenly kissing and being on the same page as if they had been together for a while now was WAY too weird. It felt like a rough draft of a teenager's story that someone randomly serialized. I could ignore the aspect of emotions not being brought forth for the reader unless they have not much experience with how it works, but the total randomness of them jumping from aquaintances to 'oh yeah, we are both totally into each other' was just bad in every way. It was random, there was ZERO hint at any of this except from the MC and in general it was a weird choice, as if the author had no idea or could simply not be bothered with investing a single chapter into getting to that part. Which was really disappointing. It was a lovely base idea but ruined by the execution being so random and lackluster. I think it can work as a nice read for people who have not much experience with writing or have in mind that they already know each other (just skip chapter 1, then it somewhat works tbh). But for experienced readers who care for good writing and realism in how people interact/react or become lovers; this is just gonna disappoint. I wouldn't recommend this but I do hope the author creates better stories in the future, maybe even tries to re-do this story. I'd love to see that. :)