ReviewRaptor's manga / #wtf just happened?(326)

The baseplot is absolutely amazing, super interesting setup and interesting characters (albeit some are a little bland here and there) but sadly this all looses it's charm due to the storytelling of the webtoon itself. I'm not sure if this is based on a novel (they usually are) and if or if not the novel is better written but...this webtoon feels like one of those that have been just too rushed by a team that doesn't quite know what can and cannot be rushed. If I had to boil it down, this feels like a comic drawn by someone that was told a quick summary of events by another person that read a novel. Then, said comic artist was left with a few instructions and the summary and told to go make a comic out of this...which sadly lacks a ton of things that make a story loose the story telling part nearly entirely or coherrent in some cases even, but all in all more like a recollection re-telling. Sometimes it even feels like the creation process went a bit like "Oh hey, and this happened between that and that, so you gotta squeeze that in over there.". And that's saddening to me, because the story has MAJOR potential with being so interesting and something filled with tragedy and potentially a lot of wholeheartedness. ;v; I actually think instead of reading this webtoon, checking out the novel might yield a better read. If you don't care much for flow and pacing and having a comic be more of a summary, then I suppose this will be a good read for you still. But I honestly think that in written form this definitely will be better (again, IF these faults aren't present in the novel too, that is). I would stick around but I'm not really into this type of writing as it is, too much is being rushed and thrown into the middle. It's not really enjoyable to me personally. So I'll see if I can sometime find the novel and give that a shot. You guys enjoy the webtoon if it's to your liking tho, the baseplot and art are definitely gonna be treat till the end, I'm sure!

The only struggle here is me reading this shit. wtf. The story is lackluster by picture perfect sefinition. Everything, from the start, feels little to not thought out and things happen more for convenience (especially character actions/interactions/reactions) and that's just the shittiest writing 'method' to use to create anything. And as early as chapter 8, things fall apart entirely. Things feel more like a roguh summary someone drew pictures for rather than a cohesive story. It's a struggle to read. And a bigger struggle to keep being interested. I'll skip through the pages and see what the omega deals with during pregnancy and how they reunite again (and yay for the 'surprise, you're actually an omega despite never showing such signs!' trope btw, that's idiotic af (and gotta LOVE people in omegaverse being too retarded to make actually useful tests to determine gender, but I digress)). But yeah, this is unreadable. Not even a little. It's just badly written and the art isn't saving it.

Okay, at chapter 4 I'm really questioning whether it's the translation or really just the writing that makes this feel so bumpy, jumpy and a bit too rushed. The introduction of the marriage partner was lackluster either way, but I'm starting to wonder if this'll be worth bothering with any further... Conclusion: At chapter 7 I can confidentally say it's both. the translations suck AND the writing. Waste of time, really.

The plot is interesting but...sadly the execution is bad. It's rushed and skips some key events that need to be there for good storytelling or even just a flowing story and the reasoning of characters is all over the place and just used to create drama or the next happening of some sort. It's really...not good in terms of writing. It feels more like a half-assed attempt at re-telling a novel in minimalistic comic format rather than a fleshed out comic. And that's just not fun to read. If you're looking for jack-off material, sure, this works. But if you want a flowing story with good...anything, this isn't it. Dropped at: ch. 8

5 chapters in and despite the bad translations...it's really the plot I think that's a mess. The MC behaves seemingly randomly at times, some stuff is skipped (minor scenes too but I'm talking entire happenings here, mind you) and all in all it feels more like a rough draft of a story or a recollection of a novel and that's really not enjyoable to read. At this point I'm just gonna keep checking in for the fucking that'll eventually happen, the story itself has lost all interest for me due to the bad writing. The core story IS very interesting but, not with THIS execution. Sadly. It's rare to see mafia settings nowadays, so I was happy at first but that's gone to the void now unfortunately.