ReviewRaptor's manga / #Unexplained Happenings(87)

I was interested at first but the flaws in writing bother me greatly... There is so many issues in just the first 4 chapters, it feels like the writer doesn't know how life works. Or how embarassment works either... I mean, the fact that his 'love' for the neighbor can be overwritten so easily makes me dislike the MC tbh. He's the most shallow character I've seen in ages. And in this scenario he doesn't even have a reason to fall for him/have a wet dream about him other than seeing him half naked so...that's saying quite a bit about him in many ways. Mainly that he's just horny for his neighbor rather than love him. Tho there are plenty of other issues that make this all just weird to read. For example him jacking off to his suppposed crush's underwear, then being caught by the other guy and STILL agreeing to living together (that would never have happened with a person that reacted in such a world-ending way as the MC did, yet the author thought that would be a natural thing to happen...which is simply weird). I'm also confused as to why the MC was supposedly 'forced to live together'? He literally owns the apartment, right? And he was able to manage living there alone so far, so either the author didn't feel the need to include key information or this was just a quick dramatic idea to throw into dialogue to 'spice things up'. Which drama stories often enough do, sadly. The fact that he later thinks the guy just up and left without telling him, even tho they are living together and hence would be forced to communicate about this matter, is also unnatural in that scenario. Anyway, I'll give this a hard pass because I'm heavily bothered by the MCs personality and the general flawed logic. I honestly don't care if it 'gets better later on' either, because I'm not gonna bother hoping for the MC to be less annoying anytime soon. Especially with so many chapters this has. Give it a try, I suppose. But if you have any interest in a story making sense or being realistic in certain ways...you should probably skip this one.

I really hoped (and expected) something better. The writing feels more like a rough draft with some parts partially fleshed out. It's way too rushed and hurries along without taking time to explain a situation in detail or let emotions or the mood of the situation be delivered to the reader. It moves from one happening to another without letting you take in what is happening and it has no focus on the emotions of the characters in general. Which is detrimental for stories like these. The characters are bland, the artwork os okay but not amazing enough to keep me interested just for the artwork alone. So, sadly, I'll pass on this one. I don't feel like any of these issues will be fixed. It's not uploaded as a promo, but the first two chapters instead so there's little to no hope these things will change. All in all this feels like a story written by a teenager that isn't aware of how this type of setting would work (hence the major logic issues aside from the pacing problems). I suppose it might be a decent first work for the author, but nothing I'll bother reading or recommending. Enjyo to whoever doesn't care about these issues, I'll look around for other stuff.

My comment got deleted but I'll say it again: The writing is amateur-like and just makes this unenjoyable to read. There is WAY too many things skipped and nothing is explained or even just visually hinted, not even a single word of 'hey this is the past' or 'XYZ years later, after I got reincarnated'. This is probably the worst story in terms of writing I have come across to be honest. And the only excuse is laziness, because it feels like the author just wanted to 'get on' to the good part and hence skipped literally ALL important information, plus discarded the importance of even just mentioning these things. I'm dropping this like a blazing potato. (Let's see if this comment also gets deleted. Probably by a staff member that's a die-hard fan or maybe involved with the author otherwise i can imagine. - So much for free speech on this website, huh? Slowly turning into Twitter and the like I see.)

"Die Idee war gut, aber Lili's Arme waren zu kurz..." Good idea, shitty execution...goddamn it. ;-;