ReviewRaptor's manga / #TOO SHORT(199)

I will say it as it is; I'm disappointed. Disappointed that this is not WAY longer!!!! This could have gone on for SO much longer (there was endless potential, very well done, Author~), like 50 chapters long of 'solving the problem' of Mister Hare, for example. I really REALLY thought and wished this would be at least twice as long. Dammit. X'D I hope the side stories won't be shorts without any real connection other than small slice of life moments. But I'm pretty sure that's what they'll be, given the ending was written as it is. ;-; Fingers crossed the author will hear my pleas and continue this someday. I really think there was lots of options for storytelling. Especially now that we know they work together and Mister Hare is such an official figure. Either way, this was amazing and absolutely adorable. The art is impressive, especially those miserable moments of our pretty Black-footed Cat boy. The author has amazing skills to create those chibi expressions. Love it. X'D Needless to say: VERY recommended, despite it being so short.

I really love this plot idea of getting isekai'd into your own/a BL story and being the side-dude that adores and gets the uke despite the issue of the original source not being really well-written and having all that much thought put into it. It's a really nice storyline, simple yet effective and this execution here was decently done. Could have been even better with more story focus and less smut focus but oh well. :) Not sure why so many people are giving the story shit tbh, it was quite a good balance between story and smut focus and emotions (albeit all being more comedy-type focused) didn't get neglected to make it something to give minus points for. It was a decent, short story with the typical funny, do-not-take-this-seriously smut main focus yet carried out well since there actually WAS a story that was developed AND a romance told. The expressions were a bit much for my taste here and there, feeling more towards psycho, yandere or creep here and there tbh but the art itself is also decent. More beginner-ish in terms of overall style and anatomy but still decent. Worth a read for anyone that doesn't expect a grand epic love triangle story but instead immediately can recognize this is a light read with lotsa bonking and a silly, idealistic and wholesome love story.

The only thing I do not like is that MC is simply NOT behaving correctly with his brother. I get wanting to be a friendly little family character, but he got sold, wtf are you just letting him back in your life for? Especially without telling him off, slapping him as he needs to be or really beating his ass. The brother is absolute trash but did not have a redemption moment and is just let back into MC's life without anything. That does NOT sit well with me, it isn't right in any form and it's really the only negative point this story has. Besides being too damn short, but I can deal with that. XD Yeah, some points deduction for that part but otherwise this story is LOVELY. <3

DETAILED REVIEW WITH BASIC SPOILERS. Okay, so first off: Do not go into this for anything but smut or comedy, this is not a story to take seriously and critique the character's behavior because this does not attempt to be anything else but porn in comic form. You have been warned. XD If you want a sweet and loving seme, go look elsewhere. Because he DOES have his moments but he still holds true to who he is in the beginning of their relationship (which is literally all this comic shows; the start of it all.) Now, as mentioned comedy and smut is the focus here and they did that VERY well tbh. The seme is a ruthless mafia member, so his behavior doesn't randomly become cliche romantic, which is not to everybody's liking but it DOES hold true to his character. Because a ruthless mafia killer will NOT, realistically speaking, turn into a blushy sweet romantic as soon as he meets his potential lover. This is something the author did quite well but again; it will not be everybody's cup of tea. His behavior is questionable at least but for who he is it is perfect for his character and gladly the MC didn't randomly turn into a cocksleeve but he actually got into it. This COULD have been done better and with more care, but I think it is decent for what it is despite not being everybody's favourite route in a story. The MC himself is ABSOLUTELY adorable and I find his backstory and personality really great. It makes him feel realistic but at the same time like a typical 'this story will not be a serious and realistic one' kinda vibe. Weird as that might sound. It's a good mishmash. The art is good, but not great in some areas. Anatomy issues here and there are found but it's nothing too major. I wish the character design of the MC was a bit more detailed? Refined? Special? He looks awfully basic tbh. But he DOES make up for it with the comedy chibi art and his cute behavior. The character design of the seme is really great tbh. I like finally seeing a character that doesn't look well-rested and perfect but instead shows his stress and age in his facial details. Again, the storyline might not be everybody's thing but I think the author did well to make it clear this is not something to get emotionally invested in but instead just view it as a king-based reading material to get horny about and laugh at the funny moments and art. Anyone who cannot handle reading things this way should really NOT read this. It's certainly for a more mature audience, not just because of the smut and murder aspect in one moment but because of the overall tone and story needing someone to be capable of removing themselves from what is going on in this piece of fiction that is clearly only aimed at people liking to self-insert as the MC. Which IS a kink of people in sexual fantasies, as much as many people on here like to forget. (￣∇￣") I would certainly recommend this to more mature readers, not age-wise but in terms of mentality. The comedy is great tho it could even be more and carry this story for a hundred chapters together with the base storyline this has (shame it wasn't used for something longer, it would have been amazing for sure!). 8 outta 10, tho bordering a 9 for some people for sure because even if I do not like the forceful aspect of the smut, it was done well enough to actually not be something I minded too much in certain ways if we view it as a self-insert or kink fantasy that can be applied perfectly to oneself. It DOES depend on the person reading tho, no doubt.

I'm honestly disappointed this did not get a longer format. The story would have HEAVILY benefitted from being around twice as long or slightly more, to make room for emphasizing emotions, change of feelings and much more. Because with such a short format it felt entirely random that the MC was suddenly, supposedly in love with the incubus since there was no real emphasis on the change from annoyance paired with convenience to him actually liking him, missing him and clearly being in love. It COULD be that it was simply done badly in the comic since they could have really used more panels of him showing more than just a blank face, annoyance or horniness, like making him blush or smile at some things more to visualize the change of emotions. But even then the time this was given is too short. The story needs more chapters with all the details it DOES have to it, but 10 chapters was not nearly long enough to make everything work. That's why it felt so rushed, random and amateurish in many ways. BUT! The story itself is amazingly beautiful. It has room for lots of improvement and you could easily make a long format comic with it. The characters are not just pretty but also lovable. Their relationship is not just horny-fodder but also sweet, hilarious, emotional on all fronts and most importantly; interesting. The plot itself is a great idea and I would honestly read this base plot a hundred times from different authors just to see each one's take and spin on it all. Or different character dynamics here and there. Even if the story is too short for it's own good, it IS worth reading. And I hope we'll see more plots like this and more stories from this author. They have a great idea on plots, just the timeframe given to let it play out needs to be adjusted. (Since I believe this would have thrown itself into my forever top 10 if it had taken it's time to emphasize emotions more and give time to show them developing feelings clearly.) It's not perfect because it's so terribly rushed, but the plot itself is great and I would recommend reading it. It's really a lovely baseplot this story is working with. :)