ReviewRaptor's manga / #SHITTY WRITING(4)

The writing of this is really utterly bad. Unfortunately, since the plot was interesting but I'm done with this constant back and forth and criss and cross of emotions/intentions. This story LITERALLY switches the MCs emotions/intentions from one pannel to the next just to fit the situation. It feels like the author had a scene in mind and couldn't be bothered to think up something cohesive to fit the facial expressions they wanted to draw and just went 'fuck it' and did it randomly. One pannel he hates him, next he likes him secretly, then he wants nothing to do with what's going on and in the next he wants to fuck. WTF is this bi-polar ass mess?? And who tf thought this made any sense. And no, this wasn't just for a short moment, this is the case from the very start, tho it gets progressively worse as you keep reading. It is certainly not a translation issue either, since even then the comic pannels do simply not match. It's just a butchered writing job. (And both the MC and the love interest are weirdly robotic in their common sense department. Like you put a AI in a skinsuit and told it to 'act human'. Also the love interest is a total jackass, but that's the least problem in this story tbh.) This is absolutely confusing and obnoxious to read. The art or base plot cannot save it, it's a waste of time if you're looking for normal human behavior. If you're fine with weird writing that makes it all seem nonsensical or bi-polar in nature; this is your thing for sure. 0 outta 10 - Not ever recommended, spare yourself the waste of time unless you're not looking for good writing or like a bi-polar writing style with no cohesiveness whatsoever.

WARNING: In-depth critique, lenthy post- You've been warned To be honest, the writing went put the window after the second season. Instead of going with logic, the characters behave VERY weird and at times random. Stupid more often than not. Which completely ruins the story for me. At chapter 59 I am heavily inclined to drop this due to how idiotic the MC finally behaves (he did so before but this was just the peak) and how uncontrollably mental the love interest went seemingly random. It felt as if the author rushed things for whatever reason, or someone entirely different took over writing. To explain, the MC clearly explained (after an obnoxiously long time) that he KNEW the guy wasn't involved with his friends bullying, he simply didn't care about her (which is normal in that situation) and even after his so-called friend treated him absolutely horribly (mental illness does NOT excuse what she did and said), she offed herself and for some magical reason he then went to take revenge on the innocent person he's in love with just to be a doormat to his friend even after she's not around anymore? I'm sorry, but that's the dumbest shit I have seen in a decade of reading probably. Things would have been perfectly fine if he did NOT clearly know, but he did. Which ruins his entire purpose and makes all his actions shitty; turning HIM into the bad person in this story (the male lead is bad in his own ways, but that is disconnected from this issue). And when things finally come out, it's the mentally ill guy who has more reason and logic until he gets random and shoves his dick in him. (I can see that making sense for someone mentally fucked up to his degree, but the writing was VERY lackluster to get there). He became a dislikable villain within moments without it feeling natural for his character. Also, what's up with making the MC tell the truth and then randomly saying 'I did it because I love you'. That makes NO fucking sense. Not based on what he previously monologued about with himself, not based on his intention for doing the things we were told and sure as hell not based on the situation he was in. He did NOT display mental illness like some stalkers that try to kill their object of affection, yet in that moment he suddenly argued like THAT was the case. It's as if the author didn't pay attention to what they wrote or, again, multiple people wrote it and didn't coordinate what they picked for the story. It's nonsensical and weird. The story was good at first and I expected the story to go the course of the MC deciding against outing the male lead and after things get revealed the male lead develops emotions for the MC since he previously mentioned people behaving differently/leaving him when they see his real personality. It would have been THE perfect course to bring things together (bring the characters together), but for some reason the author went the completely different way and fucked things up more than it already was. And in a way that seems not only unlike the characters but also like the author decided to suddenly not go with a happy story but turn things into Harada-esque territory just for shits and giggles. Or worse yet; because they knew "ah, gotta put some smut into this after such a long time, or people will stop reading.". The writing is very unpleasant and bad even in many parts. Not based on the characters being shitty (you can have a good story even with shitty characters), but based on it all not making sense from one moment to another. It breaks immersion, makes the character we should like VERY dislikable and ruins any kind of emotional build-up. If I had to say whether I like it or not, I'd have to say now that I dislike it. Which is sad because I loved the story and how well they portrayed the mental illness of the male lead. But within just a few chapters the whole story fell apart just due to 2 mistakes/flaws in logic and writing. That's sad tbh. I was hoping for another gem that keeps you reading without having to resort to stupid tropes or senseless smut. Waiting ca. 50 to 60 chapters just to get that disappointment is really, well, a disappointment. I'll finish reading what is there and then decide to drop this or not, but as it stands now this is a pretty bad read after season 2 and I wouldn't bother recommending this to anyone. I hope it somehow, magically but still hopefully logically becomes good again, but the flaws won't go away even if it does. So I'm not sure if the author can salvage this....

The writing of this is riddled with bullshit logic and overall stupidity, not just from the characters but the author themselves. NO character here is likable, the story not interesting enough to have me keep reading and the art simply cannot carry this over the mountain of dumbness there is. Classic case of a smut comic pretending it has a cohesive, well-written story but there is really just nothing of value here besides the fucking scenes. Dropped. Not worth my time. It's just overall really badly done. :/