ReviewRaptor's manga / #RUSHED(16)

Isn't it kinda nonsensical, to say that 'black hair evul' and shun the 1st prince, when the beloved little dum-dum blondie boy has a DARKER HAIRED ATTENDANT than the shunned prince himself is?? If the colour makes a person evil, why tf let a dark-haired person tend to the beloved little prince? This makes no sense. X'D That guy's hair is closer to black than the princes', so what's with that logic? Please abide by your own rules, dear writers. It's VERY important. At least the 'eye-colour = evil' idea can be avoided by only having one person have intense eyes of a certain colour (let's be honest, it's either red or yellow), but ignoring your own rule in basically the same chapter is a tad bit silly. The other way around we could have had an excuse, since the prince's hair is more dark brown and the attendant is dark green-black. If they were switched we could make it make vague sense by saying: It's a different colour tho! Even if both are dark, the people differentiate! This just doesn't feel like the author remembered their own rules tbh. ╮(￣▽￣)╭

The baseplot is VERY nice but the execition is really lackluster and feels rushed AND random at times. As so often: Like a rought draft of different moments the author thought of and liked and somewhat tried to string into a story. It's a bit disappointing to say the least. Especially since I love these kinda plots (mafia boss X rando from the streets). Such a shame. I like the art and baseplot, really, but this is more of a page-flipper to jack off to than a cohesive, intruiging story that's well thought through. I'll read the ending when it's finished, just to see what kinda ending the author has planned for these two (the opening scene is making me think this'll be bs but oh well). Hopefully the future works of this person will be better. There IS potential after all.

I don't think the translation is to blame here but: This story feels rushed, lackluster, uses inappropriate times for comedy/chibi moments in a VERY unfitting way, the art is meh and the overall storyline is giving vibes of 'author had 5 minutes to come up with this'. I have read 8 chapters and no character is interesting, their emotions are shallow and badly portrayed, the story drags yet rushes at the same time and all in all there is just nothing that seems interesting. The random, almost magic-like sci-fi car bs really wasn't well thought out either. The author could have at least MENTIONED that this world is hard-progressed in terms of that stuff instead of it just being ONE single random thing plopping up. There is too much negative points to this comic that the only positive aspect that remains is likely: This is probably decent jerk-off material for some chapters. But I will NOT be bothered to read further to see if that holds true. The art is not interesting enough for me to care to see smut of it. Not recommended. This is likely only a story for people who care ZERO about good writing in every aspect. I really cannot explain it otherwise.

I know what the author was planning to go for but the result is MUCH too rushed. The writing is okay but has it's flaws. The love interest is written very lackluster and too irrational and ditzy for my taste here, but it's honestly just the overall rushed writing and the story just not really establishing emotions as much as there should be. This is very aparent in chapter 6 for example, that grand talk was supposed to be impactful but due to their past being revealed by obnoxious back and forth jumping and emotions just not hitting as much as they could have, the talk seems almost out of place, out of nowhere, as if there was a grand emotional arc missing and we never got to see that but now we gotta just accept 'the talk' and are supposed to feel emotional about it. Personally I also have an issue with the love interest's personality. The love interest behaves a little too much like a typical shoujo girl, if you know what i mean. Especially since he was prissy about being ditched and not contacted after publicly outing his supposed partner (which they didn't really agree on at that point yet). So MC running off could have easily been a natural reaction if we view this without bl-nonsense goggles on. They also didn't agree to date, so being prissy about the ghosting and feeling like they are in a realitionship so he's entitled to being angry wasn't really a likable way to write him. Given this is female toxic red flag material in people. :'D All in all I would say the writing is good at it's core idea but the execution mediocre due to being so rushed, back and forth going and emotions just not being there when they should be. It's a decent read for younger/less experienced readers I'm sure, but for seasoned readers who look for a good flowing story, emotional impact moments and so on, there's just nothing to be found here. Which is a shame since this COULD have been a really great story, it has plenty potential for sure. Overall I wouldn't recommend it, but check it out and see if the issues in it aren't as bad for you as they are for me. It depends on personal standards and level of experience with good writing/storytelling, so you might like it either way. :) I hope the author makes more stories and learns to refine the writing and pacing, the potential is definitely there, so I'm hoping for more of this author in the future.