ReviewRaptor's manga / #LACKING(439)

Could'a, would'a, should'a, DIDN'T. The basis for the plot was interesting tbh and a nice setup for a sweet poly relationship, but this ain't it bruh. But hey, at least the little lamb is absolutely fucking adorable. I'll check chapters just to save art of that little darling. <3

Small review after just 9 chapters, because that's plenty for this one thb. While the art is decent enough, the writing is mediocre and the character logic absolutely stupid. And that from page one all the time, for ALL characters. I will not bother dismantling because this should be fairly obvious as to why. I don't know if they'll attempt to even bother portraying the struggle of the male lead, because they SHOULD, but I highly doubt that would go anywhere given how logic for these characters works and how the entire story is randomly trying to be comedic even if the moments do not call for it based on the writing/story itself. I think this can work as newcomer content, to comics of longer format in general. But mostly just for kids or rather teens, early teens to be specific. The writing is just not good for more experienced readers and it yells kiddie-content with any lack of actually planning out things and making it make sense or go about smoothly. Not for me in either way, which is a shame since the baseplot (like too many times) is good but the execution just wasn't done well.

In terms of art I cannot complain (tho there WAS some wonkyness at the start, with the pinhead moments). But the writing really seems rushed and like they left out ALOT of info, monologue that intensifies the emotions and so on. Which I know is a common problem with novel-to-comic adaptations. Some things feel almost random and emotions just don't hit as right as they should to match the situation, character reactions, etc.. Some things were completely glossed over too. Like Koo actually bottoming after he saw the MC cry. That should have been made a much bigger deal given he said a few panels before that that he does NOT bottom. Stuff like that could have made a much bigger impact if they had taken the time to convey emotions better in the comic. The core story is VERY interesting (even without the smut I'd happily read it!) and it is still a good read tho. So I'll be stalking this for any new uploads. But I will definitely check out the novel because i believe that is MUCH better written due to the faults found here in the comic.

I'll be honest: It's not my thing, because it falls short on all fronts. The story is too basic, there is nothing exciting that keeps me reading (hence why I lost interested and started page flipping at chapter 17 already). Neither the story nor the characters are interesting enough, the art itself is very inconsistent too. You can tell quite a few times that a regular artist drew this, not a comic artist. And this shows in many panels when the MC is strangely nicely drawn whereas everywhere else she looks generic, rushed or almost scribbled and then slightly refined, resulting in art that looks lackluster and wonky in terms of anatomy. The art I could forgive, but only if the story or characters were interesting enough, which they are not. They all feel bland and while the story DOES make things happen, it also feels like nothing is happening at all. If that makes sense? Emotions just don't hit. Nothing is really as funny as it likely was intended to be, nothing as interesting and so on. I flipped to the end of the chapters and even theree the art is generic and inconsistent. The writing there also feels lackluster and bland, so I'm not exactly sure this is just a 'read 50 plus chapters, then itll be good!' kinda issue (which is a problem in and of itself btw - a story does NOT need that many chapters to 'cook'). I think for new readers or younger people with less experience for detailed writing can enjoy this, but experienced readers will likely not find much of interest here. Tho give it a try, maybe it's your thing. Especially if you are not too familiar with these kinda princess plots. I wouldn't recommend this, for any aspect, but I DO hope the artist/writer learn more and make another comic. Hopefully one with lots of expertise by then. :)

I'm not really feelin this one. And it's already been 12 chapters. I know what it was supposed to be but somehow the story just feels more like the plot and it's happenings are controlling the characters, rather than this being a naturally flowing story. Like a very obvious fanfiction dictating characters into a specific direction without any flow, just goals in mind. If that makes sense? (￣∇￣") Kinda like a car steering the driver, not the driver steering the car. It feels forced and unpleasant that literally everything is forcing the MC into situations we all know he would get into anyway, just makes it faster tho, whcih i do not find well-wrtiiten. The puppy dog love interest is really nice but the other one really isn't. He lacks the specific appeal an arrogant and proud character like him needs to have, so he just comes off as a dickhead with porn-reasoning so far. I don't really feel invested. Especially not since the author made the mistake to pretend the MC has serious fear of his disgusted love interest, yet the very next panel they force him into a situation with him, making him look like a blushy maiden again. That type of inconsistency in character behavior has always bothered me and it breaks immersion each time I notice it. The base story is nice but the execution is forced in the truest sense of the word. This might not be a problem for everyone, but I for one don't like the writing and not even the characters. So I personally wouldn't recommend this, but check it out and see if it might be your thing.

The mid art I can overlook, but the writing is just not good. It's random and feels like a rough draft rather than a cohesive story. Really not gonna bother with this. Maybe someone else will if they are really bored, it's probably good to boredly flip through pages. Hope both the art and story become better from this author(s?) because there's much to learn, young Jedi.

My review will be short because there is legit nothing to adress here besides the obvious fact this is the type of 'deep' and 'cool' story a 14 year old horny teenager would think of when writing a self-insert fanfiction. And it's about as appealing too. The writing is below average, the main character just pitiful, the guy who just acts like a dog in heat is dislikable and unappealing in every way except looks. And the ending is just obnoxiously weird, rushed and bland. Making the already dislikable story even more dislikable. Even the smut scenes are not appealing. They look more like sketch practice for different poses, but not the interesting kind except maybe 2 in the entire comic. It's not worth reading tbh. Not even as jack off material I would recommend this because even those scenes lack any appeal. I hope that artist tries to make more comics, the artstyle is decent enough, but the writing needs ALOT of improvement.

There is many issues with this. And I do not mean translation, I mean the general story. It feels like some things are lost in translation, sure, but not everything. There are a few issues I had with the art from chapter one. Some expressions are WAY too dark in nature rather than portraying shock, fear, etc. that would match the moment. It's like the author had experience with dark material before writing this fluff piece, hence why they couldn't tone down the expressions to the right degree. Art aside, the writing is...not smooth or fluent you could say? It feels less like a carefully planned out pathway and move like someone yeeting a bunch of planks across the lawn that you are then going to walk on in a somewhat path-resembling manner. It's not as cohesive as it should be at times and it feels jumbled and even random sometimes. Which can break the immersion at times, which obviously is not good. In a way it feels rushed and in another it feels like it drags. We somehow skipped a chapter too inbetween 14 and 15 but maybe not? Hard to tell given the writing issues before. Speaking of issues with the writing tho, the biggest issue I had was the fact we had the great flow going for him turning into an insecure mess but then that somehow completely got just ignored and it was all of a sudden not a big deal anymore. There was NO talking about the issue from Naho's side, Kana didn't bother asking more, it simply got brushed over by them becoming a couple. Which is not ideal given the HUGE deal the author made of the sudden change from confident to insecure. That very much is a mistake on the writers part and it was quite the huge disappointment to me since we hardly ever see this stuff being done in a story the heavy way it was here. And then; POOF, not a thing anymore. Enjoy couply life and arival creating drama~. Just not a good call. I'm not sure if I'll keep reading. It's not really interesting enough after they completely glossed over the insecurity issues and gave no solution or such for it. But I might flip some more pages sometime. It's honestly not something I will eagerly await an update for tho. It's not a good enough read for that. All in all it's an okay story. But with it's flaws I wouldn't recommend it. It WOULD make for a good subject to re-do someday or maybe someone making a copy-cat plot. That would be nice, since the core story and character dynamic is quite nice. Check it out but be warned, it has plenty issues, tho maybe it'll still be a good read for someone else.