ReviewRaptor's manga / #Interesting(483)

There are a few issues with the writing but it's an interesting story. So I'm looking forward to more. Not a fan of the MCs personality tbh, but it's interesting to see this sorta dynamic for a change paired with the love interest's manipulative nature. So glad we don't get another Jinx MC type character who's getting walked over constantly or dumb as a brick. But even this guy here behaves weird sometimes. Hopefully that'll change at some point. XD The art is decent but there's also a few issues there. Somehow all panels and poses look strangely stiff or lifeless. Not sure why, there's just something off about it. Not QUITE like those comics that use 3d models as base to redraw scenes, but a slightly tips into that direction. Pretty sure if this has a novel the novel is more intricate and can manage to bring across emotions better and more clearly. The comic is a bit lacking in that department in some moments so far.

Why does this first chapter feeling like it's from the middle of a story instead of a beginning, as it should be? Kinda annoying tbh, because you feel like you missed alot of story and just randomly got thrown into it. I don't feel this is a translation issue either, so I'm not sure if the writing is the problem or not. Hard to say. The idea is good, but the execution lacking. It's not a bad read (as far as the first chapter goes) but it's not good either because it feels like major story parts were skipped and it rushes along to get to the fucking part as quickly as possible.

I'm honestly disappointed this did not get a longer format. The story would have HEAVILY benefitted from being around twice as long or slightly more, to make room for emphasizing emotions, change of feelings and much more. Because with such a short format it felt entirely random that the MC was suddenly, supposedly in love with the incubus since there was no real emphasis on the change from annoyance paired with convenience to him actually liking him, missing him and clearly being in love. It COULD be that it was simply done badly in the comic since they could have really used more panels of him showing more than just a blank face, annoyance or horniness, like making him blush or smile at some things more to visualize the change of emotions. But even then the time this was given is too short. The story needs more chapters with all the details it DOES have to it, but 10 chapters was not nearly long enough to make everything work. That's why it felt so rushed, random and amateurish in many ways. BUT! The story itself is amazingly beautiful. It has room for lots of improvement and you could easily make a long format comic with it. The characters are not just pretty but also lovable. Their relationship is not just horny-fodder but also sweet, hilarious, emotional on all fronts and most importantly; interesting. The plot itself is a great idea and I would honestly read this base plot a hundred times from different authors just to see each one's take and spin on it all. Or different character dynamics here and there. Even if the story is too short for it's own good, it IS worth reading. And I hope we'll see more plots like this and more stories from this author. They have a great idea on plots, just the timeframe given to let it play out needs to be adjusted. (Since I believe this would have thrown itself into my forever top 10 if it had taken it's time to emphasize emotions more and give time to show them developing feelings clearly.) It's not perfect because it's so terribly rushed, but the plot itself is great and I would recommend reading it. It's really a lovely baseplot this story is working with. :)