ReviewRaptor's manga / #DO NOT READ(110)

Wow, just wow. This felt like some fucked up, far-from-reality fetish fuckfest that a 14 year old tumblr user wrote. The little story that is there is butchered and hardly made into a cohesive story, it's choppy and jump-cuttish as all hell and even makes you think that entire chapters are missing. Some things are mentioned but not explained, others are just yeeted into your face and you have to accept them then and there, because around the next corner is another pile of shit waiting to be flung into your face. This is really just a fetish, self-insert I'm sure. Because even IF you are into these kinda forceful relationship dynamics...you cannot enjoy them because the author made zero effort to make ANY character likable or understandable in any way. They hardly have a personality and what they do have is trash and remains so throughout. This story, if you wanna call it that, throws happenings at you without stringing them together properly, all so (seemingly to me anyway) that the next cringey fuck scene can start. This is trash. And the type i seldom see on here with this level of average, early 2000-type of artworks. It's not worth reading. Spare yourself the waste of time. Not even as wanking material, mind you. There is nothing of worth to be found here from start to finish.

This is a good example of one of those webtoons based on the concept of drama for drama's sake just so the story can be longer. And why the hell do all these webtoons skip from the moment the person gets pregnant up to the point where the kid is several years old!? WTF?? You basically cut of a very crucial, character building and empathy building part just to get on with the story. It's annoying and makes things boring tbh. And more often than not: it makes your work predictable as can be if you use that 'mEcHaNiC' while writing. This is a halfassed story tbh. It's a plot we've seen multiple times, does nothing new and the few things that are of substance are boring and lackluster. It's a page-flicker at best but not even that is enjoyable. Not recommended, at all. Better look for another story that uses this exact plot and I'm sure you can indeed find a good one that's somewhat enjoyable to read.

Boring, as all hell. Both the formatting/layout of the pages and the storytelling make this SO unbelievably slow paced. Many things feel rushed too tho, others obnoxiously shoe-horned. It's just a mess. It's generally a story that's terribly predictable but tries to throw bits and pieces in to make it 'hip, quirky and unique!', like a teenager on Tumblr that copies others and hence...isn't special in the slightest but just a weirdo. You and I have seen this plot a million times, but most of the time it has been executed better. it's like the author cherry picked popular plot themes and threw them all together, trying desperately to make it work as a somewhat coherrent story but...it's not really working. It's tedious and had me predict all happenings' outcomes as soon as they started. Which is just plain bad writing. For kids this might be a really good read, someone who doesn't know what all these cliche plot points will ultimately lead to and for someone that doesn't know what good writing is...but for anyone else? Spare yourself the pain. Not recommended, moving on.

The baseplot is very interesting but the execution is...lackluster at best. It wasn't so bad at first, things felt a bit amateur-ish but were still good but once the 'evil schemes' part began...things fell entirely apart. There is a time and place for having lighthearted, chibi moments in serious scenes but...this work just uses it ALL the time. Which makes everything feel like it's being taken barely serious, yes even the RAPE, and all in all it makes the characters just unpleasant. Not in a 'he's a villain so he's unpleasant' way, but in a 'he's supposed to be the villain so why does the art portray this moment like it's some cutesy chibi, fun time?? wtf?'. That just ruins everything. I don't know if this is an amateurs work, but this could really REALLY do with a rework sometime. Less focused on funny faces and more on seriousness. Otherwise it's really not a good read, unpleasant overall and kinda leaves a bad taste in your mouth if you're mature enough to put yourself into the story and understand how flatout inapproriate the comedy-based depictions are in many parts of the story. I would advise to skip this, or at least ONLY read up to the part where they go on their first date as per the seme's request. After that, stop reading to spare yourself the bad writing.

Sorry, but this manga shows perfectly what's fucked up about the Omegaverse community. Their first time was nothing but rape, if their roles were reversed you fuckers would be condemning the Alpha for forcing himself onto the Omega, but because the roles are as they are you guys actually cheer this on. WTF, shame on you guys. Get therapy. The Alpha might be a bit arrogant and deserving of being put in place a bit, but the Omega is nothing short of a psycho. If he hadn't forced himself onto the Alpha, I'd actually recommend this. But like this? No thanks. You can keep this fucked up piece of trash in the garbage bin where it belongs. The art might be nice but the story is trash. And I know not everyone is cheering the Omega on, but DAMN are there a lot of idiots who do. FFS this Omegaverse community brings forth the biggest trash, not gonna lie. 0 outta 10 - Avoid reading. Don't be fooled by the pretty art.

Great, another one of these sub/dom trash stories that just use the trope to justify displaying abuse and glorifying it. The smut is ugly and a total turn-off as well and the art doesn't save it. Nothing to see. Moving on.

Sorry, but if you want to turn a script into a story the basic things to follow is: DON'T MAKE THE DRAMATIC STARTING POINT THE FUCKING DESCRIPTION AND THEN START THE COMIC FROM THE END OF SAID DESCRIPTION. Can you people at least TRY to make a cohesive story?? Because it sure as hell doesn't feel like it. I mean, you were so incredibly lazy to skip the introduction (that you put in writing into the summary only, not even a text-only page with fancy frames and some lackluster pictures in the back...as is the NORM for anyone that wants to rush past certain points at the start of a story)...nah, you fully on went the route of "I cannot be fucking bothered to put important information into THE COMIC ITSELF, but rather just scribble it as a description and make people feel like they started reading in the middle and/or some chapters are missing. :3". If you don't want to put in effort...just don't do it at all. It wasn't THAT much work you had to put in and it was important too. If you're lazy at the start, it's plain to see you'll cut corners at every chance you get and hence make the experience (for the reader) at very best mediocre or absolutely bad because it doesn't feel like a cohesive, flowing story. The baseplot is interesting, but given how much of a throw-off the bad writing practices are I'm not gonna bother with this. I've read enough stories to simply know how obnoxious this corner-cutting will get, so no, not gonna waste any time on lackluster works and instead will look for ones with effort put into them. Not recommended, on any front tbh.