ReviewRaptor's manga / #BAD WRITING(264)

Murderer Llewellyn's enchanting dinner invitation

Complete | Sum Na Gi,Muk Bu | 2000 released

Great, it seems that glorifying and fetishizing murder/murderers is becoming a thing now. At least this one has more logic than the last one and he does NOT let the body rot in his home for days or weeks (which didn't make sense for a public figure in that other trash work). He only lets them lie around for a day or two, even if that also makes no sense. The logic is horseshit, the fetishizing of a killer/psycho is downright sickening and the chapters are jumbled up as fuck early on. DO NOT READ if you have any decent humanoid features, mentally speaking. If this was a story that portrayed a psycho killing for good reasons, wanting to stop and needing to get help with the help of their newfound love, then I'd read it. But this is just subhuman trash for people that think fetishizing, let alone jacking off to murderers (just because they look nice in the artworks) is A-OK. Fuck this. Even the trashiest Omegaverse crap is better than this kinda shit. And THAT's saying alot if you know my feelings about that rape glorification genre...

The Mistress Runs Away

Ongoing | Baekseoleun | 2019 released

Okay, so the author HONESTLY wants me to cheer on a girl with as little as a personality as a piece of toest and a guy that justifies killed puppies AND their mother and supposed sire look-alikes all just because the dog ran away while in heat and got pregnant? Yeah, no. Fuck that shit. Whoever thinks a character like that is in any way redeemable lacks understanding of humans other than themselves. If you had given him a reason as in, she turned on me so I had to kill her because she couldn't be trusted anymore. Then maybe I'd have bothered reading this. But not like this. This is yet another author that thinks giving a character a psycho personality trait can just remain unaddressed, be glossed over and/or just used as a 'ooOOooooOo~, he's so scary and dominant! <3' kinda trope trait. Do better. And stop glorifying psychos and murderers. You people have issues.

Boy meets Girl

Complete | 바이퍼,Viper | 2000 released
2022-10-26 18:47 marked

My Hero Academia Dj - Yoru Wa Mijikashi Koiseyo Shounen

Complete | sakana kusai,sakamei hamachi | 2000 released

Why would you bother making a doujinshi with characters if you end up just using their appearance, not the CHARACTER in it's entirety?? Just make your own character instead of basically falsely advertizing and clickbaiting. (Because that's what it boils down to if you do this kinda stuff...) As long as you don't look for the MHA characters but just read it as smut, sure, it's okay like any other boy-tiddie-styled henta-artist-gone-yaoi works out there. They did bother using a closely resembling style for Midoriya and his AllMight moments, but they turned Todoroki into the most feminine twink you can imagine (and gave him a thirsty hentai girl type of personality...wtf). So it's basically a rondo bitch with the looks of Todoroki, just very feminine (they even draw him some twink tiddies, URGH). Waste of time in general, there is better out there but also worse. You do you, but I would recommend NOT reading it.

One-Way Romance

Complete | Tae-shik | 2000 released
2022-11-19 00:23 marked

How do i say this...both the art AND writing feel like a teenager HEARD what manga/webtoons are like, tried to copy the style of someone popular and then just went at it with a lackluster written plot. The art is WAY over the top in many cases. The expressions are way too exaggerated in 'funny' panels, average art is too...'toothy' if you catch my drift (it feels like you look at monkeys baring their teeth, not humans smiling or talking) or they look like they are too extreme for the situation (often looking like something from a psycho horror situation, WTF? - the artist has clearly not much grasp when it comes to understanding how to portray human emotions) and you can tell that the artist has not much skill for some angles since they look wonky af and there is visibly little effort put into them even on the very first pages. If this was re-worked, I think it could be great (IF the damn translation isn't halfassed as it was done here right from the start... I cannot recommend it, for anything really. Not even the plot is unique enough to make it worth reading or just skipping pages. And the sex scenes themselves aren't worth skipping through for either, since the first one literally goes from 'NO don't do this :v' over 'but I'm gonna~' to 'OH FEELS SO GOOOOOD~'. There is literally NO coherency, sense, emotion or justification for such a sudden change. AT ALL. It's a good attempt for a first work I guess, but that's it: an attempt. The execution leaves much to be desired on all possible fronts. 1/10

To My Dear Wolf

Ongoing | Ma cherie | 2019 released

A Dancer’s Hero Offering – The Legend of Zelda dj

Ongoing | Shinsei lolishota (kozi, tamako) | 2019 released
2022-12-25 02:20 marked

I Tamed My Ex-Husband's Mad Dog

Complete | Jagyum | 2019 released
2022-12-26 05:37 marked

This was just infested with lackluster-ness...geez. The story itself is good tho there is a major flaw even then, but this is the first time it's only the COMIC ITSELF that ruined it. Not the art, it's good, but the way they portray scenes or rather the lack thereof is what ruined it. The monologue depicts the story as a reincarnation story, in which the MC has been given a second chance at life...but she never WAS reincarnated. She stabbed the guy and got banished all while talking about being reincarnated...just to get to the same outcome?? That makes no fucking sense. Unless the translation is shit and someone just MADE IT about reincarnation despite her just talking about 'being given a second chance' which just meant her NOT BEING KILLED FOR THE ATTEMPTED MURDER. One way or another, this is a major flaw that kinda ruins the reading experience. You cannot go about talking about how things went bad, then being reincarnated and STILL ending up in the only scenario we know (neither the text depicts a more miserable outcome for her before her alleged reincarnation nor does the comic depiction/art, so everything falls apart here). Someone either fucked up the writing or the story just IS horseshit in this aspect. The art is good enough, the story too, but i don't think it's anything new or original. It's only interesting aspect is the child, which...we all know will be the love interest...which is kinda creepy tbh. The age gap is way too big. Unless they suddenly come with the shit logic of: He's actually a grown as man, just a few years younger than the heroine! He's only so tiny due to malnourishment. Teehee~ :3 Which i have seen people do and it's just stupid on every level. I wouldn't recommend it as more than a page flipper. If they mess up the most basic, simplest but also important detail of the plot right off the bat, I have no hopes there will be no fuck-ups later on, so... Check it out but be warned that it's a story you've seen out there multiple times. All while not being a good representation to boot.

Nightly Taming of the Werewolf Duke

Ongoing | Han riang | 2019 released
2023-01-02 09:08 marked

Breaking a Romantic Fantasy Villain

Ongoing | Minmacho,Dding jini | 2019 released