ReviewRaptor's manga / #BAD WRITING(230)

Great, another one of these sub/dom trash stories that just use the trope to justify displaying abuse and glorifying it. The smut is ugly and a total turn-off as well and the art doesn't save it. Nothing to see. Moving on.

Pretty badly written and the art isn't really the highest quality in my books either. So I'll abandon this one, nothing of interest for me here (especially since the light-haired guy is a dickhead).

Sorry, but if you want to turn a script into a story the basic things to follow is: DON'T MAKE THE DRAMATIC STARTING POINT THE FUCKING DESCRIPTION AND THEN START THE COMIC FROM THE END OF SAID DESCRIPTION. Can you people at least TRY to make a cohesive story?? Because it sure as hell doesn't feel like it. I mean, you were so incredibly lazy to skip the introduction (that you put in writing into the summary only, not even a text-only page with fancy frames and some lackluster pictures in the back...as is the NORM for anyone that wants to rush past certain points at the start of a story)...nah, you fully on went the route of "I cannot be fucking bothered to put important information into THE COMIC ITSELF, but rather just scribble it as a description and make people feel like they started reading in the middle and/or some chapters are missing. :3". If you don't want to put in effort...just don't do it at all. It wasn't THAT much work you had to put in and it was important too. If you're lazy at the start, it's plain to see you'll cut corners at every chance you get and hence make the experience (for the reader) at very best mediocre or absolutely bad because it doesn't feel like a cohesive, flowing story. The baseplot is interesting, but given how much of a throw-off the bad writing practices are I'm not gonna bother with this. I've read enough stories to simply know how obnoxious this corner-cutting will get, so no, not gonna waste any time on lackluster works and instead will look for ones with effort put into them. Not recommended, on any front tbh.

Okay, while the base plot (for the millionth time) is GOOD...it turned to shit later on. All of a sudden (as if chapters were missing or someone cut parts out of them OR just random SUPRISE DRAMA STUFF from the author's part)...the mentally not-all-okay uke turns into a batshit crazy fucker with absolutely ZEROzero logic. I get that you want him to be a bit antisocial, messed up and whatnot...but seriously? Out of the blue you come with a 'Oh yeah, he's gonna beat the living shit out of the little brother, that we NEVER heard anything about except existing and he's probably gonna kill him too, not sure, and give his mangled body in a suitcase to his wannabe lover!'. WTF is wrong with you and what drugs were you on to have THIS kinda surprise happening make any fucking sense??? Someone either didn't give a shit, didn't know how goddamn idiotic this was or they just don't know how to write in general. It was good until that part, it would have made sense to use the fucked up TWIN to use this scene, to scare the wannabe lover away. But it makes zero sense for what the uke/main character was like (mentally and in terms of personality) up until then. It's like you got a sudden change of heart and REWROTE his entire personality. At least drop and remake the story then, don't just shove it in there and act like it's normal and sensical. TF. At this point I'll only keep flipping pages to see the smex and fighting scenes and IF or if not the uke will actually reveal what horrible things he's done to his lover's brother...and if there will be ANY sensical reaction towards it. It's not worth the read after the chapter of a black-haired boy being compared in looks to someone. Either read up to there and then leave or just start reading for the smut scenes only, because a good story is nowhere to be found after that point. Sadly. Promising at first, but another disappointment I cannot recommend. The art can't save the shit plot.

SIGH...again one of the plots that's great in what it was on paper, but the execution is just WAY too rushed, effortless and feels like rough pieces of plot stitched together so we can move along to more interesting parts all because the writer didn't want to spend 2 more minutes thinking of how humans would naturally interact and move past certain happenings naturally. A page flipper maybe, but only because the art is pleasant enough. Otherwise I'd skip this ASAP. Still not recommended tho...

Could you lot STOP butchering stories by 'censoring' the sexual scenes? If you can't handle scanlating hardcore stuff, don't do it. Especially if you basically go and change the genre and butcher the story to the point of people not knowing wtf is going on since pages of context/conversation is missing. Just stop and leave it to someone else please. This is incredibly obnoxious...