ReviewRaptor's manga / #BAD WRITING(205)

I really hoped (and expected) something better. The writing feels more like a rough draft with some parts partially fleshed out. It's way too rushed and hurries along without taking time to explain a situation in detail or let emotions or the mood of the situation be delivered to the reader. It moves from one happening to another without letting you take in what is happening and it has no focus on the emotions of the characters in general. Which is detrimental for stories like these. The characters are bland, the artwork os okay but not amazing enough to keep me interested just for the artwork alone. So, sadly, I'll pass on this one. I don't feel like any of these issues will be fixed. It's not uploaded as a promo, but the first two chapters instead so there's little to no hope these things will change. All in all this feels like a story written by a teenager that isn't aware of how this type of setting would work (hence the major logic issues aside from the pacing problems). I suppose it might be a decent first work for the author, but nothing I'll bother reading or recommending. Enjyo to whoever doesn't care about these issues, I'll look around for other stuff.

"Die Idee war gut, aber Lili's Arme waren zu kurz..." Good idea, shitty execution...goddamn it. ;-;

This reads like some cringey af teenager firstime story. From the late 80s or 90s. WTF. XD Hard pass. It's rushed, the art is really not my thing and the writing is just lackluster.

I'm really starting to get tired of these types of webtoons. It's not the story, it's the fact that someone picked up this novel and tried to turn it into a comic all while leaving out MAJOR parts and important hints as to what is backstory, what is current timeline and what makes a story immersive anyway. If you need a text page of sentences that explains wtf is going on: You're doing a shit job. People, if you cannot put in the time and effort (and DON'T KNOW how to turn text into comic format) then please for the sake of anything ever holy: Do not do it. This is neither a nice read nor does it make me want to read the novel, if anything, it pretty much makes me stay clear of it if I would suspect that THIS is what the contents and skill level in terms of writing would be what awaits me... Granted the plot is really...dumb. I mean, the author could have put some logical thinking into the reason as to why the girl is hated. How the flying purple fuck is she supposed to be resonsible for her mother's death if she wasn't the one to make the horses freak or manipulate the carriage?? WTF. (Unless it was the comic team that decided to change this part to how dumb it now is, which I've seen people do before, for some fucking reason.) Either way, the plot is not interesting enough nor is the execution of it being turned into a comic in any way pleasant. I've lost all interest and a lot of patience with this. I'm out. Enjoy if you can endure this lackluster, hole-filled storytelling. But I'm not gonna bother with this shit.

(Only spoiler part would be the general issues as well as mentioning the supposed love interest's personality...it's not really spoiling anything, so no tag) The setup for the story was really interesting but...the writing is a bit of a mess. One happening after another keeps being thrown at you. Before you can deal and settle with one, another one is thrown at you. Making the pacing feel extremely rushed and a bit lackluster at times even. Characters aren't introduced properly (if at all) either, they are thrown at you just the same. No names, personality or general sense of what you should feel for them is being portrayed and keeping on reading doesn't yield any quick solution for all these important factors either. All in all you're being bombarded with info while reading and left to figure it out yourself/piece it together. If this was about some kinda mystery plotpoint, sure: That would be fine and would work perfectly. But for character relations as is here? It's just a bit of a throw-off, rips you out of what little immersion there is and makes this just a mess of a read and not enjoyable if you're looking for detailed/intricate writing or storytelling. The story's base plot is interesting, the MC is very likable to boot, but the pacing and storytelling issues cause me to loose interest at chapter 8 already. Too much trouble that simply outweights the little that I could call a reward if I would keep on reading. (The love interest's personality is VERY off putting by the way. He's giving me psycho, rape-y AND general yandere vibes: All of which I despise, so that's a major reason to fuck off away from this if nothing else...) I can neither say this is bad nor good. Nor can I recommend it or say people absolutely shouldn't read it. It depends on your preferences and what level of writing you are used to and looking for, I suppose. Check it out, but I honestly can't say this is something I'd ever mention to anyone if they asked me for a story to read. :/