ReviewRaptor's manga / #BAD WRITING(205)

REVIEW TIME: I was initially quite interested but...there's quite a few things that bother me and make this not really enjoyable to read. First of all, I'm a bit bothered by how much of a Mary Sue the MC is but the fact that the story focuses on so MUCH around the introduced plot (marrying the beast for supposed recreation, which ended up being entirely ignored while she just took over the job of the duchess), it really bothers me. We get many many things thrown at us that get solved quickly and have detail (tho it still feels quite rushed here and there) and the issue with the duke is being treated like a sideshow comedic relief. Even tho it should be the main focus, given how important and severe it's supposed to be. Besides that, there are great issues with her past/current relationship with the old king (which she casually killed, apparently - that issue was WAY too quickly over and done with compared to all other stuff). One time she likes him, the other only he like sher and then it goes back to something else again. This COULD be due to translation errors but...it doesn't feel that way. And given the lackluster writing issues besides this, it really just feels like bad writing that never saw a proof reader. As much as I love these curse-breaking plots...this is a chore to read through. The main character is not nearly interesting enough and the male lead is basically treated like a dog-brained side-character. There are interesting aspects here and there, but they are heavily outweighted by the bad ones. Sadly. It's no fun to read, nor is it interesting enough for me to want to keep reading. And 30 chapters in I expected at least something to grab my interest. Have fun to however doesn't mind these issues I noticed. But I'm out.

7 chapters in and I literally don't like any of them and half of the plot is just confusing or so jump cut-y that it seems random or confusing. The seme (darker skinned one) has such an awful personality but not just because of his obvious power abuse thing he has going. He behaves random at times and is dumbstruck because of the simplest things: He's quite literally an idiot. AND an asshole. Nothing to like there. The seme's friend(?) is just the worst kind. Scheming, trouble-causing and straight up phsycho at times. Fuck that guy. The uke...oh boy. While he is a character that comes across as relatable and someone I like seeing finding a happy ending...he's a backbone-less idiot. If the seme threatens you with 'sit down or I'm gonna keep ordering food to throw on the ground!'...just LEAVE you fuckwit??? What's it to you if he makes himself look like a goddamn asshole and nutjob. This was the point of you realizing he's more than toxic, more than the type to not get involved with. But you did as he said...for what exactly? His reasoning is absolutely stupid and nothing relatable or anything that halfway makes sense. Not without more of an emotional, physical or money-related dependance anyway. Which did not exist. All in all, the artwork is nice, the story remotely interesting but ultimately destroyed for me because of the randomness, messy writing and just general rushing and stupid behavior. If it's the authors first work, it's okay. But it's really nothing I'm gonna bother reading or can recommend. The translations are strange and confusing at times and there seem to be a lot of order issues with the pages? It's not badly translated tho, certainly not the usual 'Google Translate' kind we see WAY too often. So the translators will actually get more praise from me than the author themself. Which is a first, I think.. Anyway, enjoy it for whoever can enjoy it and doesn't mind the issues I found with it. I'll move on to the next one.

It's a nice read an all, but...geezus, the Mary Sue-ishness of this is starting to get annoying (and quite boring) by chapter 7 already. It would have been better to tune that down a little and just once in a while bring it up instead of making that the standard and have it happen SO damn quickly one after another. It makes things too predictable and a tad bit boring too, which is sad really. Rather than the MAry Sue aspect being such a big focus, it would be nicer to see her working and gradually getting better. Or at least master a few certain things instead of just magically being an all rounder whenever the plot needs her to be. That's really not enjoyable to read after just a few chapters, sadly. I like the art and basic story of 'good princess being in hiding while emperor looks for her desperately', but I'm honestly not sure if I can endure the Mary Sue aspects just to see the plot end in romance or whatever. It's too exhausting even so early on. Not sure if I'll have the interest to keep reading, but so far it's just getting a meh rating at best.

Holy FUCK are there some logic issues in this one. It's super confusing and some thing are hardly explained. It's an ok read, but really nothing I'd recommend. There's too much mental fuck-up happening too...

While I don't mind the typical, nonsensical yaoi logiks to move the plot along into a certain direction...this is kinda dumb af. I mean, trying to deny that you're an Omega is nice and all (it's useful to have your worklife go smoothly and not be discriminated against, etc.), but seemingly being in full on denial or just ignoring the facts (which simply cannot be ignored away, mind you) all while NOT taking medication that obviously is needed to make the lie work/not go up in flames is really fucking dumb. It's like me saying "I'm not a biological female!" while there's red niagara falls streaming out between my damn legs. Just...stop. It's like the kindergartener saying he didn't eat the cookies while he has crumbs around his face! X'D And the seme isn't better either (tho i suppose that's the authors fault obviously): "His personality is that of an alpha but I'm sure he smelled like an omega!" :v Like...dude, no shit?? Is this story set in a crippled power fantasy world in which any Omega is a submissive, spineless fucktoy? It does come across that way very slightly, but come on. What tf is with THAT logic? That's the same as saying every man is a Chad and every woman a Karen... Not very appealing, to say the least. I for one can't handle that kinda annoying logic so I'mma leave it at that. You lot have fun and enjoy it if you don't care about this stuff or can overlook it. I'm out and looking for something a bit more up my alley. Cheers!

I know what the author meant to go for, but it just doesn't work. Anyone else except the MC is a douchebag I wanna see get beaten to a pulp, but the author is trying to make the reader feel sympathy or like for all of them in their own way. Which doesn't work with this execution. No feelings come across except for those of the MC, even if you're supposed to feel sympathy for the ex (which would ONLY have worked if his introduction was different...) it just won't arise even the slightest bit after how shitty he behaved. I'm not gonna like a character that was introduced like THAT, so there is really no need trying. It's more obnoxious than anything else and none of the things the author is trying later on make it work and magically let you forget how much of a shitbag he was when he met his supposed 'lover he so desperately searched for for ages'. Just quit it and let him be the antagonist along with his new bitch-boyfriend. That would have made this more enjoyable. As it is now: It's not. The new love interest of the MC isn't any better either tbh since he could have gone with any reason except for "Ah well, I only pity-fucked you, so don't go catching any feelings, 'kay? :)". I DO get the apeal of an aloof seme that doesn't have any feelings for the uke yet, but goddamn is this intro for him trashy. All in all, the MC should fuck off away from all these people, start anew somewhere else and get a regular, average and decent person to fall in love with. That, at least, would be better than wasting time with any of these shitheads tbh... It's just not enjoyable to read, nor can I really say I have any interest in the story given how bad the logic and execution is. Hard pass from me on this one.

My comment got deleted but I'll say it again: The writing is amateur-like and just makes this unenjoyable to read. There is WAY too many things skipped and nothing is explained or even just visually hinted, not even a single word of 'hey this is the past' or 'XYZ years later, after I got reincarnated'. This is probably the worst story in terms of writing I have come across to be honest. And the only excuse is laziness, because it feels like the author just wanted to 'get on' to the good part and hence skipped literally ALL important information, plus discarded the importance of even just mentioning these things. I'm dropping this like a blazing potato. (Let's see if this comment also gets deleted. Probably by a staff member that's a die-hard fan or maybe involved with the author otherwise i can imagine. - So much for free speech on this website, huh? Slowly turning into Twitter and the like I see.)

EDIT: Also seems to be falsely tagged with smut. So far, except for touching and kissing, there was NO sex scenes shown. Meaning; it's NOT smut. Maybe there is an uncensored version? But as it is right now, these uploads border shounen-ai more than they do yaoi smut. Minus the usual innocent aspect shounen-ai generally has. But still. What a letdown... Chapter 20 : Did you guys seriously cut out major chunks of it and then upload it? You might as well just NOT upload anything then. If I want to have a rough draft of keyparts of a chapter, I can ask someone to describe it to me. Don't bother uploading this kinda chapter, butchered to a degree it hardly makes sense and feels more like a flashback from a One Pice episode of the previous arc so the watcher is up to date...just don't. =_=