ReviewRaptor's manga / #AWFUL(100)

The character logic of literally anyone in this is so bad that it makes me thing this was written by a literal teenager thinking they know how to write a cool, awesome and intrigue-filled plot. I just can't. It's so hilariously dumb that I'm both crying and laughing at the same time. X'D The art is okay but cannot carry. But the base storyline IS very interesting, which makes the shitty character logic even more of an eyesore. But then there is also the TONS of magical MAcGuyver/Mary Sue-ish moments that make the writing pretty bad. This could have been amazing with better writing, the core of the story is super nice. So I hope someone, someday makes a better copy-cat comic of this storyline. Would be nice. ╥﹏╥

Best description: "If ur looking for a plot and love story, i doubt this one is for you. Still good read if u like seeing dicks and balls every page."

EDIT: Dropping this at ch 78. It got even more time skippish and everything is just rushed and focusing on random sudden things without finishing one aspect from before and it keeps adding thos OBNOXIOUS timeline skips even in the middle of conversations. This is just shitty writing now. It was alright till the first 'arc' final, which wasn't even an arc, it was just random tbh. I hope the novel is better because this comic is honestly very badly done. Wouldn't recommend other than looking at art and even that is lower mid-tier tbh. :/ I now reached chapter 75 and I really have to ask: Is the romance part in the original source ALSO this badly done as in the comic? Their relationship went from failed flirting attempts or just badly portrayed emotions to 'suddenly Imma confess and we both have bad reactions to it all'. This felt WAY out of order, too random and confusing to see unfold all of a sudden. If at least a few chapters beforehand she was constantly reminding us that she had deep emotions, then sure, but there was barely anything at all in those 75 chapters. I think you can count them on one hand even. And I mean where the emotions actually got portrayed well and visually and per context of the situation made a clear step forward in the romance aspect of things. Is the novel the same? Is there just as much of a lack of emotions being conveyed in their romance scenes? Because if not then I really have to wonder what the comic creators were doing. They put so much effort into literally every other little fart that's going on, but the basically second-place focus (the romance) isn't being done even mid-tier well. It's quite the disappointment considering the writing otherwise seems to be decent or great even. So this feels really strange to me. As if the author (novel OR comic, I dunno) just didn't give a shit about the romance part being portrayed well or at all even. The romance up to this point is SO badly done in the comic, it's as if it was shoehorned in so it's not only a slice of life/political drama story. Which I could totally see being a thing tbh, it has the plot for it anyway.

The writing of this is riddled with bullshit logic and overall stupidity, not just from the characters but the author themselves. NO character here is likable, the story not interesting enough to have me keep reading and the art simply cannot carry this over the mountain of dumbness there is. Classic case of a smut comic pretending it has a cohesive, well-written story but there is really just nothing of value here besides the fucking scenes. Dropped. Not worth my time. It's just overall really badly done. :/

I'm 3 chapters in and I had already lost interest to 101%. And I DID try and read further but, it's not getting better. So I'm out. The art is nice, character designs too, but it's wasted on a plot about an absolute doormat special alpha seme and the bitch-bitch omega uke who doesn't care about others in the slightest. (note to all creators: narcissists are not appealing unless you make them a cute-type tsundere) I'll give the creator credit for turning the roles around at least, but it's still an unappealing setup I have really zero interest in. So I'm sadly going to drop this. Nice art tho, so I suppose for some people that can carry the comic. Depends on taste I guess. ╮(￣▽￣)╭

Alright, surprisingly 6 chapters is enough to write a review for this on the basics. XD (A review means critique/negative things being mentioned, so you have been warned.) I'll refrain from mentioning the major lack of logic for the characters or on the author's side but I have to mention these things. While the artwork is impressive, the plot is horseshit. VERY interesting at it's core, but the way it's done is just really unappealing. And the art is quite frankly the only thing that can save it. If this had ugly or mid art, people would likely not be bothering with it. Not only do we start of with rape, basically (even if it WAS in a dream, they were both sentient and 'there'), we also have both characters entirely ignore the situation if we're honest. Emotions in general are being portrayed weirdly. Especially since the entire comic seems to not be able to decide whether it wants to be a light-hearted comedy piece or an actual mental issue portraying dark comic. It hits neither of those spots well and dangles in the middle. I really find the basic story interesting, as goddamn mentally defective as this karma from a past life is, but if this was at least done in a cohesive way (not dnagling in the middle of two genres) and maybe NOT start out with rape that's being ignored, it would be SO much better. At this point I am utterly uninterested, as pretty as the art is and as interesting as the base story is. I just hope someone will make a copy-cat story of this in a good way someday, because this is honestly not appealing unless you have some problems or can ignore aspects such as rape and issues like the dangling genre thing. Either is worrisome to me tbh. XD I will not ever recommend this. Not even the art can give this points, the issues with the writing are just too big.

Finally I get a comic with a hermaphrodite and it's completely ruined by the most unpleasant, fuckwittiest smut plot to have ever fuckwitted about. Art cannot carry either. How unbelievable sad. My disappointment is immesurable. And my day is ruined.

The MC/ML(? the soldier dude) has absolutely random writing in terms of behavior tbh. Nothing he does really makes sense except create a reaction, situation or dialogue to drive the plot. There is no sense to his actions, no rhyme or reason even if you do expect some sorta background story chapter to show up, none of this works even then. If this was based on a novel, it'd say the people making this comic skipped key scenes or misunderstood the writing and portrayed him a bit off, but this is not based on a novel, so technically there shouldn't be any rhyme or reason missing. I could see how someone might think THIS is how a tsundere is supposed to act, but even then, the random 'dick-hard - lets shove it into his face' moment was the pinacle of randomness. No explaination whatsoever either. Tho then again, the dude thinks knocking someone out is perfectly fine and NOT landing him in the guardhouse and all people around him do not remove him from the side of the uke either but instead push him there. The writing is heavily lacking and I can only wonder why i do not see a smut genre tag up there. Because that would PERFECTLY explain all of this. Because smut is essentially just porn in comic form and DOES more often than not lack right about any sense. XD I'm not sure if the story is good enough to keep going. Neither of them are interesting as characters because of the lack of proper introductions and the overall 'zombie virus' plotline isn't really made important enough to think THAT part of the story is worth sticking around for. So my guess is this will be carried heavily by the art, which I can very well see happening. It is great art so far. But I do not read for art only, especially not if the character we deal with is utterly random and obnoxiously written. I guess they are both good looking and bonking will eventually happen, but I'm not quite sure if that is really worth all this enduring I'd need to do. (And many comments aren't really making it look like it's getting better.) I didn't get hooked. I'm not an art-only person. The art is great but the characters utterly basic and bland. So I might flip through pages here and there to check but I honestly do not see any appeal besides the art here. Which is a shame since this setup HAD potential, it just wasn't used well. Maybe because the author is new to writing? It seems that way anyway. But the base idea was good, so I think there is high chance for improvement. You do you, give it a try, maybe the MC/soldier is your type of character and you'd read just for him, but all those looking for good writing will likely need to look elsewhere.

I got 2 issues, so hear me out! THE PERSONAL PROBLEM: I honestly cannot read this in a serious manner. I keep smirking, eyerolling and covering my eyes with my hands. XD Everytime this cake/fork stuff is mention it just makes me cringe in some sorta way because it sounds so weird when you listen to it. Like some 2001 made-up OC name from deviantart that the author thought sounds suuuuper cool and whatnot, but for anyone outside the teenage world it just sounds weird. If you know what I mean? I get people want to mix up the Omegaverse nonsense, and I am FULLY for it as there are a million better ways to do it, but this would have been better off being just an altered Omegaverse or at least choosing different names for the 'roles'. This honestly just doesn't sound good. So reading it just breaks immersion every single time, which isn't making this a good read in specific ways. Which is a shame since the plot idea is different (but still essentially the same rape-allowing plot) than Omegaverse. You could have made this some god/demon related stuff, mythical creatures, curses and blessings. Literally ANYTHING but calling people a food and tool. That's just weird man. I can't. Just thinking about it is making me crack up again. ( >∇<) THE REAL PROBLEM: The problem I have with this more than the weird name choice is: There was LITERALLY no reason to make this another rape story. The story set itself up as the 'forks' not being able to taste. You could have turned this into a very highly sexual tension story, anything from a sweet caress that's too long to endure to hardcore edging for the uke. There was no reason to make the seme, yet again, a fuckwit that cannot keep his dick under control when this was all about finally having tastebuds again. Absolute zero reason. And I am convinced half the readers could have come up with a MUCH better plot idea with this setup. All without having to resort to rape and 'haha, me powerful so you no have any say HURRDURR'. (Super appealing btw. [/sarcasm.exe crashed]) Due to the writing being trash tbh, I would not recommend this. I literally lost interest as soon as the seme said 'go to the police, I'm powerful so nobody will do anything anyway'. None of that is appealing, even for someone with a rape kink like me. Which is sad. Even in shitty scenarios I can usually manage to find appeal here and there. But this had me immediately nope out. And I don't care to wait for 'character developement' either. So I'mma hard pass. :/ Maybe as jerk off material this is good enough for some, but as a story? Really below mediocre. Which is sad since, again, the base idea WOULD have been interesting.

My review will be short because there is legit nothing to adress here besides the obvious fact this is the type of 'deep' and 'cool' story a 14 year old horny teenager would think of when writing a self-insert fanfiction. And it's about as appealing too. The writing is below average, the main character just pitiful, the guy who just acts like a dog in heat is dislikable and unappealing in every way except looks. And the ending is just obnoxiously weird, rushed and bland. Making the already dislikable story even more dislikable. Even the smut scenes are not appealing. They look more like sketch practice for different poses, but not the interesting kind except maybe 2 in the entire comic. It's not worth reading tbh. Not even as jack off material I would recommend this because even those scenes lack any appeal. I hope that artist tries to make more comics, the artstyle is decent enough, but the writing needs ALOT of improvement.