I'd have liked to see more than a one shot of this story. As it is, the flow is confusing. There is a kiss in what seems to be college, then nothing for seven years. Next page, "Let's live together as a family with my sister's abandoned daughter! Yay!" What? Is it common for ANYONE to do this? The plot concept had great potential, but I can see why it stayed a one shot. The concept was hastily and poorly executed. This is a story that couldn't be told in one chapter, yet it was squeezed into one. Such a shame.
Patchwork (fujitani Youko)