It's a cute story and I'm a fan of bdsm stories.
It's just also kinda boring, though.
The pacing is really strange; very rushed and kinda clunky.
It adds the comedic and "cute" feeling of the story, but also means that we never get any deep or meaningful plot and tension is hard to built up to keep the reader interested.
So, cute story but kinda bland.
Knock on Wood