It's a no from me. The story elements are rushed, if not non-existent. The tropes are tired af. I clicked on it, because I was hoping it'd be a no-nonsense, bad-ass omega in charge, but instead we have:
First chapter: rape
Second chapter: "I didn't know he could make expressions like that" You just met this man yesterday -_-
Third chapter: Already nesting for his abuser
Like, for someone who is just getting into omegaverse stories, this is probably amazing. But I could search "omegaverse" and find no less than 20 stories with these exact same story beats...within the first three result pages. Smut's good tho
stockholm At its finest
Wait if this is really your first omega verse, there's a billion others that are much better than this
I appreciate your concern, but I'm gonna politely ask you to read my comment again
ah my bad, I read it as you were 'someone who is getting into omegaverse.' The rest of your comments makes more sense now.
That was so sweet and wholesome, and I love the lore (≧∀≦)
That being said...I want that demon to fuc-
Let's start off with the obvious: Lil Bro is terrible for hypnotizing and SAing Big Bro. I'm moreso concerned with everyday relationship between the siblings. Now that the disclaimer is out of the way....
Am I the only one who found it hard to root for Big Bro?? The characterization was that he hated Lil Bro for simply existing, then it was added on that he was always copying him, better than him, etc. I get the inferiority complex part, but narratively it wasn't a compelling enough reason for me to sympathize with him when he did nothing but be a dick to Lil Bro...simply for existing.
He's aggresive, abrasive and never takes the opportunity to have an actual conversation with Lil Bro. Mind you, Lil Bro's not helping the situation either with his petty, conniving antics, but the both of them could benefit from a heart-to-heart. Then we get to Ch.27...
IT WAS RIGHT THERE (╯°Д °)╯╧╧ They were primed and ready to hear one another out, and then Big Bro goes and ruins it by being a simp! Yes, I'm aware that doesn't fix the hypnotism plot, but picture this:
The brothers have the heart-to-heart and realize how one another's behavior has affected the other party. They slowly learn to get along with the new understanding that they have of each other.
That way, it opens the path for either A) Lil Bro to confess and Big Bro can have the option to forgive or hate him for his manipulation or B) Big Bro's shattered memories finally come together and he leaves Lil Bro for good to get with Sunbae. (Whatever love interest you're rooting for)
My main point is that we as an audience could've had some closure for their relationship as brothers before the whole hypnotism plot blows up in their face. Instead - because BL - we have to deal with...all that bs in the last chapter.
Like, I know I am invested in a story when I'm rushing through the smut to get back to the plot (and writing entire thinkpieces in the comment section ╥﹏╥)
It's so hard to get good smut + plot + art in the same story nowadays
You took the words out of my mouth.
Frankly, I couldn't gaf about who bottoms; they are both delicious. I've already endured an entire season of narrative edging. Shiiiiii, atp I would even be satisfied with some freaky frottage
I'm gonna keep reading it, but it mirrors the plot methods from Boy Meets Girl beat for beat, but without nearly as much depth or room for redemption. Dude drugged this man, changed his genetalia, SA'd him and then didn't even have the decency to take his life-altering change seriously. Worst of all is the seme's motivation for doing so being nothing but internalized homophobia.
Like, if you're in it just for the cvntboy smut, cool. But is it too much to ask for some consent and a decent (unique) story?
This is my exact sentiments. Call me a hypocrite because I do like Boy Meets Girl but this Seme makes me want to hurl in this one. Urgh. I’m peacing out. I hope he ends up with the pharmacist.
1. I didn't like the seme for manipulating the uke's emotions just to get his jollies, especially knowing the inferiority complex he already had
2. I didn't like the uke for not STANDING TF UP! Like, I get it; he has an issue with his self esteem, but letting him (seemingly) use you as a substitute is just...nope. He barely got any character development.
What's worse is that, if this were written better (and maybe a little longer), it actually could've been a tease for the viewers that eventually evolved into the uke standing up for himself. They could've let the seme have his deplorable fetish, have the uke eventually stand tf up, and they end mutually liking each other on equal ground.
The way my boy Luke is tryna "no homo" his way outta accepting that he wants this man to crack his back like a glowstick is honestly hilarious. My boy, we know what you are!
boi what
The people rendering readers' problems with the lack of character development as nothing but an inability to recognize a "slowburn", please be so fr. The problem lies in the stagnancy of the characters coupled with no healthy, foreseeable redemption at this point.
Dan has the constitution of a wet paper bag, which once began as endearing, but now borders on insufferable. JK is an angry, abusive monster who seemingly lacks empathy. This is all we have seen as an audience for 50+ chapters and has hardly deviated.
There's a myriad of red flags I was originally able to overlook, because with proper storyteling, they could have been apologized for or explained away. Now, it just seems like there's no realistic, satisfying redemption I can see for this. For me personally at this point, there is no apology, backstory, or otherwise that's gonna justify JK being as unhinged as he's been.
Anyone looking through the previous chapters for human moments for JK realistically are only going to find two: Him speaking with Granny and him showing a modicum of consent after getting drunk.
"He paid off Dan's debts!" - because it was an inconvenience to him that Dan had other things distracting him from solely focusing on his physical therapy. Need I remind you, he walked in on Dan getting ROCKED by his debtors, and his first thought wasn't "Oh no, Dan! Do you need help?" It was "You're late." The only reason he beat them up was because they challenged him, not because he was concerned for Dan.
In order to avoid making this post any longer, I'll skip over him referring to Dan as his "property" and skip to where I lost all hope:
Dan decides he wants to get the rich man a heartfelt present. Instead of asking this man for a raise that he knows said man can easily afford, he takes a night job; he works tirelessly for that man by day, then makes his money for his present at night. Said man notices how tired he is, but doesn't care or ask about his health. Once Dan finally gifts said man the present, instead of appreciating it or the work Dan put into getting it for him, he throws it away. He then mocks him for being so sentimental and berates him for exhausting himself and not focusing solely on his physical therapy.
I've read "slowburns", and the good one still have better ways of portraying potential for a healthy, realistic love story than this has. If not, the author gives clear and/or nuanced indication as to why the love might result in toxicity. This story makes it seem like there's supposed to be a light at the end of the tunnel, while giving us nothing but Dan torture porn.
It’s quite blatantly obvious that there’s nothing redeeming about JK, but what I’m surprised is people trying to justify his actions. Like baby, ain’t nothing justifiable about his shitty attitude towards not just Dan, but to everyone around him. I hope everyone reads your comment and also can agree with what you’re saying!
I agree. I don't know why some people are acting like some of us are being too sensitive about stories with violence and abuse. We're fujoshis, so basically grew up on toxic BL, and we know what a toxic turned healthy love story looks like.
Examples of slow burn stories where the "top" had a major redemption was Maya from Hidoku Shinaide and Seungho from Painter of the Night. With Maya, he was abusive and we could tell that he genuinely did like Nemugasa and just had trouble expressing it in a healthy way. With Seungho he was also toxic but he did care about Nakyum and slowly began to show it in their sexual interactions and by buying gifts. He just needed to show his love with holding Nakyum hostage and abusing him.
However, with JK we can't tell if he even likes Dan or not. It's been confirmed that JK does like Dan from what his actor friend said but nothing in his actions shows that. Even the "kind of nice" things he's done like saving him from those thugs and letting him live in his house were things that ultimately benefitted him.
Personally, I'm still going to read the story because I still kind of like it. I do hope that people aren't being rude or hateful to the author but people are allowed to voice their disagreements with the direction the story is going.
REAL ASF there’s some idiot in the comments responding to everyone that’s criticizing the story and it’s pacing, talking bout some “y-you just aren’t the target audience
Wtf the other half of my comment got cut off, what came after “target audience” was: ‘like no bitch, people are right to be critical that we’re over a year, fifty-fucking-one chapters in, and both Dan and Jaekyung only have shown a microgram of character development.
And plus, with the chapters being so short (fucking 10 days for a 3 minute read? Bruh), no shit that people are getting fed up and feeling like the story is just spinning in circles.’
Why do emojis sometimes cut off comments :(((
LMAOO THEY SAID THE SAME THING TO ME but fr tho aint nothing progressive that’s happening in the story, just really torture porn.
1. For the people who whined in the comments about incest...
A. They gave a whole content warning about it.
B. Why did you read it if you knew you were just gonna come bitch and moan about it? Baffling fr
2. Before I start waxing poetic, I liked the incest. Cry about it. If all you can see is the taboo, you're automatically gonna miss out on the story itself.
That aside, I really liked the story. I had read a comment that I liked that showed that the author never once said "incest good." The crux of the story was more about the psychological and moral aspects between the two: a brother who was desperately trying to keep up appearances for the sake of living up to the potential his brother saw in him, and a brother who (eventually) realized said brother wouldn't be able to reach his full potential if he were to remain around.
(I'm purposely disregarding the epilogue for the moment)
The best part to me was the juxtaposition between Akio's views and Motomaru's. Akio was fucked up on the inside and presentable on the outside, and his brother was the opposite. Motomaru, despite being aware that he was a fuck up, still had a decent understanding of societal expectations (e.g. cleaning the house before the teacher arrived, working a job that he hated, apologizing to Akio's FWB). Akio, with the mindset that all he had to do was "break" his brother, was genuinely surprised when he could still be so cordial as to formally apologize to that girl despite enduring days of being violated.
I personally feel like some people misinterpreted the epilogue, but I already wrote a detailed response comment to someone, so I'll try and keep it short: Motomaru, whether he wanted Akio or not, did everything in his power to keep him on the right track. He knew Akio loved him, but he ignored it for his sake. The kid had a bright future ahead of him, so why would he immediately fuck that up? Get a job, encourage his relationship, encourage his education; when none of that worked, run away. It was only when he realized - even years later - that his brother was always gonna be fucked up that he could finally just say "fuck it" and be with him.
A SANE PERSON!! Pls be my friend!
Nope. I knew I was gon be pissed off reading something marked Tragedy, and I did it anyway -_-
Without my emotions getting the best of me: It was well written. I understood the struggles of the father, of the MC, of the oprhan boy, and of the unrequited love interest. I get why the story had to go the way it did. For that reason ONLY, I tried to be impartial with my rating.
With that being said, they both gon rot in hell. The father is insane, and his "son" deserves to be under the jail. You went through the same thing as this lil orphan and then you leave him to be abused because you wanted "daddy's love"; I'm glad you got hit with a bat. What kinda fuckin "mentor" are you? This spiteful fuck couldn't stand seeing a kid genuinely happy, so he left him to not only get the shit beaten out of him, but also to die in a fire. Then had the AUDACITY to think you was gon live in peace with his grieving father who hated you? RELEASE ME!
The only people I actually felt bad for were the unrequited ML and the orphan boy. They deserve a happy ending away from that fauxcest shitshow. I ain't never reading this shit again, chile.