beta
It has nice art but I can't feel the storyline. Like it's mostly just cursing and being angsty teenagers and I don't really feel the warmth from the couple. Yeah the art may seem like they are being romantic but it seems like they only want to convey the love through art and not through storyline. Even the latest love scene, it's as if they're enemies being forced(?) to fuck eachother and then appear all lovey-dovey the next second. I know I curse a lot but do you have to curse in every single dialogue you say? Reading it kind of feels unpleasant. I know it's part of the character but isn't it a bit too exaggerated? And there where parts where it was confusing rushed or didn't make that much sense or didn't feel necessary to the overall story. Overall it's like the art is the filter that covers the not-that-good storyline but hey at least it ain't a toxic one i guess.