Katojikuta November 25, 2020 7:18 am

What needs to be change is one the story
It's too fast and simple and we don't even understand what the character past even is completely.
You need to draw the characters not use 3D models. It's alright to use 3D backgrounds everyone used them and also use 3D figures to help with drawing the characters movements and poses. If you wanted the characters to be 3D, draw first then 3D model not just 3D models then move on to another chapter.
The story feels like it just came outta of your head then into the drawing process. That's a big no. You should try writing first and understand how to progress the story better with Character development and other stuff. Also people tend to forget this but make a character that would be different from everyone with their own unique taste and personality.
The point is there but if pacing it too fast would be bad so I suggest firgure out how to pace it better and also do better with the fighting scenes. It won't work if you can't transition through panels and where they move and go. Like walking to a palace. You see the character walking then the next panel shows where he is going, the palace.
It's better to write a novel then reread it with others and you can make a story that is interesting that many would love it or hate it.
Make sure if a comment is made about your book make sure to read them and do your best to improve and figure understand what to do next on your next book or chapter.
I don't know if you'll read this but from a beginner in writing and knowing how to make stories. Creative writing is a way to begin if you know how to make that creative story a good beginning, middle, and end. And because this is just a comment. I don't have to write properly to make this. ( ̄∇ ̄")

    Katojikuta November 25, 2020 7:21 am

    Oof auto correct is a demon... ugh using phone to write is hard since I can't reach the symbols in time for my next word plus I'm lazy

Katojikuta November 23, 2020 1:26 pm

When you try your best but you don't succeed
That's Litterly what I heard when i read the latest chapter and omg it's funny XD

Katojikuta November 23, 2020 1:17 pm

I love this story too much it's too funny. Plus If only he could get the idea

Katojikuta November 19, 2020 9:31 am

I'm smiling... gosh they are so cute together (づ ̄ ³ ̄)づ

    im addicted:D November 21, 2020 5:53 pm

    if they don’t end up together imma throw hands ;-;

Katojikuta November 4, 2020 7:28 am

The prologue is actually interesting and I wanna read it more. Maybe when it updates again I'll understand more about the two

Katojikuta October 18, 2020 7:43 am

Omg the cliffhanger so good but so terrible to is readers
I wanna read more XD
I love this story So much(≧∀≦)

Katojikuta October 11, 2020 5:08 am

My sister was screaming and laughing after seeing chapter 3.2 XD it's was funny af

    Angel October 28, 2020 9:03 pm

    Just perfect.
    Especially the art change xD

Katojikuta October 11, 2020 3:21 am

They really hit us with real life... like that give me more (=・ω・=)

Katojikuta September 10, 2020 7:12 pm

Oh my god
My my my heart take it
I'm dieinnnnnnnnnn

Katojikuta August 9, 2020 8:33 am

Well damn... there's more lolis... shitttttt

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