
the whole idea/plot is good but the storytelling is just awful the pacing is inconsistent which makes the story hard to read i wish the author introduced us more carefully to the lore instead of just shoving it on to our faces everything just happened too fast there's also the fact that seiji is a child goodness gracious it's just horrific it's sad that hink died but im a bit more relieved now that he's a king it will be lonely but at least he's a lot safer and has lot more freedom than before i just want seiji to be happy im hoping that he isn't going to end up with the blue king though but that's probably not going to happen because he's almost always present and i just hate it

i kinda wanted it to hurt more the way the story was wrapped up was too mellow for me my tears were kind of a waste (yep i cried bc i relate so much with nakata) it's not really that bad but i wish the pacing was a little better i think it went on a bit too fast an internal monologue for tanaka would have helped i really liked both girls btw they were both nice and thoughtful especially futaba
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