beta
There are things I like about it - the FL still loving the ML despite his personality change is heartwarming and nice. I like that the girlies besides the FL are powerful in this story without being evil and all in different ways. However, I don’t like the ML race swap the connotations are WILD, especially when the demon he merged with is white. Just give man black hair and a new hairstyle we can’t be acting like the dark skin isn’t an allegory for his loss of purity. Especially when he changes back (proving that the skin colour change isn’t a tan or something) and they talk about how angelic he is - yuck. Also the FL literally becoming shakespeare is cringe as hell I am sorry. Literally give her, her potion’s proficiency and have the shakespeare parody be someone she sponsors and occasionally pretends to be with their blessing. The FL is just so unrealistically perfect - she is charming, a natural potioneer, literally shakespeare, master schemer. Like, girl, have a flaw besides sometimes being nasty to men who deserve it and your selfish desire to survive(!!) which was resolved in chapter 1. There is so much potential here but the author fumbled with the two leads horrendously.