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I have a couple of combs with this just because I understand the way that it progressed and it is beautiful but at the same time I find a solution that is always better is to talk to him to come to the realization of his feelings for the porn to fall off him to see his master And I believe that seeing each other again would’ve been good for both of them. I think he would’ve realized that he was in love with was the memory of what they shared at that time. He does understood him for the time that he was at, but I believe that those emotions would’ve gone away at one point now he’s just stuck in this frozen spot of this memory that will never change and that he will never come to circle with just as I believe that the master did love him somewhat as he loved his family, his wife, and by the way his apprentice because he’s a samurai if you guys don’t know about this, if the Doctor Who is originally actually a samurai which they have a lot of different paths was at one point he gave him his name and has a duty towards him. They sleep with them at one point where they’re teaching them so in my opinion, I think it would’ve been way more dramatic and way better, but I do understand why I had to end this way in the concept, it’s just I don’t exactly like bittersweet things and I don’t think I like this at all. I feel like this is a cop out For everybody involved. It’s this unrequited sense of in completion that is so very human and I do not enjoy that.

I thought you would plan better and instead, if he still could’ve stupid, it doesn’t deserve anything he’s going through, but he feels a little bit dumb like I’m starting to agree why they banned Omega from taking the throne

Am I opinion I think peanut is right like our girls like one of them is the past life I think she was just absorbed into the more dominant one that was needed at the time and that’s what’s supposed to happen overtime but the more crazy or dominant personality kind of overdrew the other one I think that’s what happened and that’s why we have that crazy ass fucking bitch I think the other soul most likely was the softer nicer one in this life that had gone through a lot of shit but was so much less dominant and did have a desire to want all those things just probably not in that way so now I feel like shit and kind of hope she You know saves her if she still there

How do I put into words that this story has too much story and because of that and kind of the plot itself is shit it pissed me off. It didn’t even make me feel melancholy because I was always angry at the dog God like I didn’t get it like the whole story pissed me off the way that they set it up a little bit for him was kind of shitty because it and itself doesn’t make sense to keep a human trap like that has to be some selfish ass fucker to want to have a bunch of people be your literal concubines at that point because you’re lonely at the same time it isn’t just lonely. It’s like it’s not inappropriate God there’s no analter if it’s as old as they say it it is there is no guardians because it’s supposed to always have like two guardians with it to be helpers to help with loneliness that’s one of the main things that I was so confused about it being so different. I don’t know even if it’s because it’s not for humans it makes no fucking sense to me



Like the whole story, I was unnecessarily angry at that freaking dog the whole time I’ve never been so angry at a dog that in itself felt very confusing. The assault was also very uncalled for unnecessary. It was like very what the fuck I do get that it was to make like a ruse or like for a brother into a corner but bro, it’s not like he can leave like I get tormenting him and like telling him but still not doing anything at that point just punch him or some shit there was no need for that type of assault so yeah the story kind of pissed me off. I read it out of spite and because I wanted to know the ending, it is good and the fact that it could’ve been good. This could’ve had like a nice 30 chapters even with a nice developed story it would’ve been the typical short BL anymore, but it would’ve been good.

I can understand why everybody calls the story kind of boring, but to me. it’s because of the type of story this is like the orientation?
A very complex story very relationship oriented very much so about the individual characters behaviors specifically when you have like a reset button and do over for everything that you did wrong that turned out horrendously you get to see their approach to it, but because it was originally about their relationship and everything they occurred towards it. It feels boring because it’s very technical.

Like ml the fact that he’s trying so much to let go of the person he loved but contradicting himself I love how very complex all the characters are as well as he wanna make everything better now that he has the chances but he’s very contradictory because emotionally what he wants and logically of what he knows he has to do is very showing if you look at it proper and to the reader, this can seem very boring because it’s very technical they’re so very flawed and it’s very entertaining if you get into it this is a very slow story that you should read like maybe one or two chapters once in a while and then get over

This isn’t really the type of story that you I also like the MC because a lot of people he seems overly passive, but it’s more like he’s an overly calculating person because of all the trauma another thing he’s gone through so because of that he overthink, and even if he has a little bit passive he weighs too long to do a lot of things and it turns out being passive because it’s not a lot he doesn’t need to do a lot. He’s learned to just roll with I like their characters I like how it focuses on their relationship to the minute because that’s what the amount wanted to fix. You don’t go back and try to fix everything. Maybe there are some small things that he changed but this is what he wanted. This is all that he wanted so what’s the point of showing anything else but this

Dialogue is conflicting the art is not really that good. It feels uncomfortable like it needs somebody to fine-tune everything including somebody needs to edit the shit out of the dialogue. The clothes are good though very good. They just need a little work with proportioning and everything but everything else is fine.

This story feels like a draft. It feels kind of like the alpha to the complete version of the story, it feels like a final draft that you get to tally up when you can add a bunch of stuff. I take it back. This feels like a beta to an Alpha draft Because in the last version of the draft you at least have everything. like there’s a clear difference between being mediocre and a story being rushed, and this feels like both like there’s holes and things that need to be added to the story like it’s super obvious and that’s a problem. It’s one thing if the author just did not feel like adding it, but it’s completely different when it felt obviously lacking

The thing is all I wanna know is for there to be a man like this where she does a lot of bad deeds and it’s kind of a big bad but it’s not even the protagonist that does anything. It’s the actual God itself that wasn’t paying attention at first, they’re like you should be a good candidate and I’m like oh no you’re a sinful bitch that is insane. I’m gonna take them from you because you don’t deserve them. She is crazy. I genuinely want a plot like that like with all the romance all the servings everything else but like that’s a big part of it, we’re like she publicly loses her powers to a point that she cannot lie about anything else for it to be like we gave a fucking signal to the pope or whatever that he must tell that she was sinful and a crazy bitch so her powers were taken from her, and she naturally falls into ruin because at this point, the gods are also clearly just immense pieces of shit might as well they might be demons

OK, so far so good so I kept procrastinating like I knew that I would like this story but when I kept procrastinating until I was waiting for it to have a lot more chapters which I did not succeeded in

I wish I wouldn’t a little bit more than that about explaining why the tentacle monster kind of does that or needs to do that besides mating and babies for more reason like I wish it went into better detail because of course it made me Hella uncomfortable because technically the father figure is it’s Mom. I know it is I’m not dumb. I wish it was explained at one point or another to have that he was basically impregnated and gave gave birth to OCTO so yeah, I wish to explain tomorrow and the fact that it’s not for him that it’s just a normal natural thing that he needs to do to survive and because he loves affection from its mother, it needs to feel close to them and he just he probably doesn’t understand and he just believes it’s closeness like that part made sense genuinely but I wish it wouldn’t more into why exactly they have to do it that way and do they do it with all types of animals and how far do they go and a weird part of its explanation it was saying the OCTO has eyes and that it’s a special constitution and I’m like oh wait did he inherit having eyes and does the species not usually have eyeballs so they can’t actually see but our little baby has eyeballs because he was born from a human so it looks like that doesn’t happen usually that it breeds with a human. I wish it went more into explaining that except not just sprinkling it around everywhere.