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(〜￣△￣)〜 Probably an unpopular opinion here, but --

This had such a strong start, but the story seems to have already gotten lost in fucboi land. *sigh*

Soo-young's boxing career was destroyed by an injury he didn't have the funds to pay to repair, while his boxing hyung used his weakened state to sexually prey upon him seemingly against his will. Then, after he breaks away from his hyung, he gets mixed up with korean yakuza to pay back a debt his dead-beat father owed. Boss became interested in him because of his animalistic fighting spirit, so lets him join the org to work off the debt. Boss, meanwhile, is quietly trying to find the mole/leak in his organization.

But instead of starting to address any of this, now it's just like everyone wants to spend a round or two in Soo-young's yaoi hole with nothing else going on with the rest of the plot. While I will admit the art and smut is very aesthetically pleasing, this isn't the story promised from the set up at the beginning. I really want to see Soo-young beating people into a pulp and rising up in the org, and becoming and more and more entranced with the damage his fists can inflict on others, while they search for the mole, etc etc.

The boss wanting Soo-young to be his side-ho should've been a plot development later, much farther into the boxing/debts/mole plot. Soo-young should've been working his butt off to impress the boss over the course of the story, not have the boss entranced with his shapely glutes right from the get-go and going on a ex-bf-smashing rampage like right near the beginning of the story. *facepalm*

I hope this sidetrack to explore Soo-young's sexy poopchute is gonna be done soon so we can get back to the meat of the story.

While I generally liked this one, something seemed a little off about it once I got to the ending.

After sleeping on it, I realized what bugged me about it.

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The end of the story gave the role to Ms Seo that should've been given to Ms Song.

I'm going to assume with the rest of everyone that Manseok ended up with Ms Seo, because that makes the most sense given the story we got. But it doesn't really make sense, given the setup of the story.

Ms Song is the female mirror of the main character, Manseok. Manseok is a plain guy who has one particular fashion-related habit (fetish) that is in severe opposition to his gender norms. Meanwhile Ms Song is plain girl who has a habit of not conforming to her gender's fashion norms. Contrast that with Ms Seo, who is a girl who celebrates her gender norms (in terms of fashion) to such a degree that it's noteworthy.

Basically, Ms Song was put in the same sort of bad state at the beginning of the story that Manseok was. This should've been the story of both of them triumphing over the nay-sayers together.

And let's be honest here, Ms Seo, despite petty jealousy going around the office, isn't going to have trouble catching a boyfriend given she's good-looking, a fashionable dresser, and an aggressive go-getter. She intimidates some guys, sure, but there is no way that any of those dudes at that office wouldn't go for a round in her foxhole given the chance.

Also let's not forget that Ms Seo was one of Manseok's abusers at the beginning and middle of the story, while Ms Song has always (if quietly) been on Manseok's side the whole time. Ms Song has liked Manseok for years (starting with when he stood up for her once), while Ms Seo constantly used him to get out of doing busywork, or pushed BS her bosses pushed onto her down the hill to Manseok, that is until the end of the story when he stood up for her once.

Now, I'm not saying that Manseok is incapable of landing a hot gf, and I'm not saying that Ms Seo isn't allowed to have a redemption arc, but I do think that stories and character personalities should build on themselves, and that the author fails to keep a steady through-line with the character arcs in this story between these two girls, and it's a huge flaw.

What I mean is this -- It should've been Ms Song who fussed over Manseok's well-being and ran off to the hospital with him, and it should've been Ms Seo who decided to stay and snoop around Manseok's apartment without his approval. Ms Song is characterized as being insecure and not wanting to stir the pot while also being thoughtful; these personality traits would prevent her from invading Manseok's personal spaces without first asking him. Meanwhile, Ms Seo, being outgoing, aggressive, and not wanting to bother with tedious stuff, would easily justify sending someone else off to the hospital with Manseok, while also thinking she had every right to look around his house and inside rooms that are closed-off.

This change would force the two girls back into the right tracks for the remainder of the story, and would effectively swap their roles at the end of the story. I mean, this is supposed to be an underdog sort of story, where the socially oppressed characters are able to stand tall and "win" in the end. This should've been Manseok along with Ms Song.

In the end, I think the author just wanted to pair Manseok up with the "princess" character, since winning the hottie is more masturbatory than winning the "plainy". Poor Ms Song. I guess you do have to spend hundreds of dollars a month on fashionable apparel and makeup and spend hours a day styling your hair and applying makeup to look good for the guys, else you'll never be able to go anywhere in life. Ho hum.

It's honestly a hard to believe this was written by the same author as Munetaka-sama no dame maid. This story was soooo much better than that one. And really good 3P story? Shock! This may in fact be the best BL 3P story on the website.

I also can't believe (but am happy) that all of the dangling plot threads were wrapped up here, like:
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The estranged mother, how Yuu's second gender slipped through the cracks, how Yuu came to be suppressant intolerant, researching into how two alphas could bite-bond with the same omega, what the exclusive alpha-only school decided to do when an omega was discovered among its ranks, Yuu's difficulty paying bills and finding lodging when not supported by his family, the two alphas getting their funds cut off by their familys and having to figure out what to do as well, etc. Most authors don't even think about half of this stuff!

This nice art with amazing uncensoring is wasted on a junk rape-to-love plot involving hosts (geez I'm so tired of hosts) full of stereotypes and cliches.

I was really hoping for a more entertaining experience with a pee fetish going on here, but it really wasn't showcased visually that much and was mostly only used to transition the seme to "normal" sex later since the uke was able to get him off without any peeing going on. I mean at least the story never forgot about it. But so much missed opportunity for geyers or sprinklers of peeing spraying all over the walls and furniture, or peeing in the butthole, or just anything more interesting than pissing on the floor with a dick up your butt. May as well just be cum if that's all you're gonna do with it.

Also, the plot is really basic. Seme treats uke like a possession because uke is able to give him a stiffy whereas other people can't lately, and uke just sits there and takes it while scowling at seme afterwards. It's characterized as because the uke makes cute faces when he's getting violated/humiliated, not really because his peeing is particularly hot. Anyway. Then the author tries to cram in an "oh the seme is actually a nice guy (cough even though he raped the uke several times at the beginning of the story cough)" backtracking arc for all the groans.

(caveat: I only skimmed the last 3 chapters because I was bored to death of the plot and characters; the most interesting character wast he yakuza guy who doesn't hardly get any screen time and is mostly used for cliche purposes)

Crazy peeps here be readin' mpreg and urethra plug stuff and in the same breath be sayin' bara shouldn't be allowed on the whole site because of a one-chapter fisting manga... c'mon. ┑(￣Д ￣)┍

Whelp, I feel like Taku would be better for Haesoo (both his calm considerate nature and general stability), but it seems like Haesoo wants spitfire Joowon regardless. What can ya do? ╮(￣▽￣)╭

I guess it's more-or-less up to Joowon to make a decision one way or another at this point and take action. I just worry, because Joowon's treated Haesoo so poorly historically, I can't really tell if he's learned anything from this ordeal or not. I hope so, for Haesoo's sake.

Well, I think this could be over by ~ch86 if the author is willing to call it done once Haesoo's love life is finalized, leaving all the tangential plot threads dangling. The loser would still need some wrap-up, along with the salty ex-model of Taku's, the stalker ex-bf of Haesoo that ex-model has been using to creep on Haesoo, and srsly, where's my photo exhibition melodrama? Been waitin' for that plot bomb to drop since around chapter 30-something, LOL. I'm guessing this will most likely wrap up at ~ch100, or possibly sooner with several side-stories. It feels right on the precipice of being done though. ε=ε=(ノ≧∇≦)ノ

I do hope that this comic won't feel as draggy upon reread after it's complete and all the chapters can be read back-to-back/binged. I like what the author has done here generally, it seems pretty hard to write a legitimate love triangle where you really aren't sure for most of the comic what the outcome will be. Props. (๑•ㅂ•)و✧

In the latest chapter (83), Joowon....
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Seems poised to maybe tell folks in an interview that he beat-up the bully in HS for Haesoo's sake. I'll be interested to see if he just uses Haesoo's name, says "my brother", or says "my lover/fiancee/husbando". Joowon's such a lose cannon, anything's possible. He's gotta be such a fun character to write for sometimes.

What l think leaves readers with mixed feelings by the end of this comic is that the story set up at the beginning is not the story we got in the end.

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At the beginning of the story, Jungyeon and Sunwoo are introduced to each other, where Sunwoo is the younger, socially-awkward son of the man Jungyeon's mother is remarrying. These are the first two who get screen time together, and this is the first plot point that is explored. First off, this is totally by itself a Marmalade Boy setup where the expectation is that these two ("siblings") will get together in a romantic relationship. And then the story goes on to painstakingly have Jungyeon try his hardest to pull Sunwoo out of his shell, while feeling more and more comforted by Sunwoo's quiet consideration and care of him. Classic setup for an in-family romance.

Meanwhile, we find out not much farther into the story that Jungyeon is in a relationship with another man, Hyunjin, and Jungyeon is insecure because he thinks Hyunjin doesn't like him that much despite Hyunjin acting like a low-key obsessive, crazy, yandere stalker. This is confusing since these two perspectives of the same relationship don't really agree with each other about what the current state of their relationship is. But it's clearly presented as not-good for Jungyeon. This usually signals that a break-up is needed somewhere later in the story, so the audience is now expecting it.

Also, normally, the reveal that a male character has a boyfriend (not a girlfriend) is BL plot-signaling to get the perspective character (in this case, Sunwoo) to think about dating same-sex, something he would never have considered before. Again this sets up Sunwoo as someone who is intended to the be the focus of the main romance.

It is also worth mentioning that Sunwoo had enough perspective chapters and screen-time to be considered on-par with Jungyeon, making him very clearly the secondary lead. Both of these characters have way more screen time than Hyunjin gets. Hyunjin is generally treated by the story as a supporting character, at least for the first 2/3 of it.

So, with all this set up, we're expecting that by the end of the story, Sunwoo's confidence will have improved to where he finally stands up for himself (and/or Jungyeon) against Hyunjin, causing a break-up, after which Jungyeon and Sunwoo's love for each other will be confirmed. This is the basic conclusion we, as the audience, are promised.

But instead, we get a story where the Jungyeon stays with his original boyfriend, Hyunjin, who is actually a good person, and our second lead, Sunwoo, is left with no boyfriend, not even a potential love-interest, and let's be honest here, has no wrap-up at all romance-wise.

The setups that did have payoffs were that Sunwoo's confidence did increase to where his social anxiety is reduced to more normal levels and he can interact with people now and stand up for himself now, but he didn't really gain anything from it (he actually lost everything he wanted from it). And Jungyeon, tired of being in a nebulous, unclear relationship, finally has a relationship that is stable and committed, even if it's not with the person we're lead to believe it should be from the setup at the beginning of the story.

There really needs to be a set of side-story chapters or spin-off story that wraps up Sunwoo's love life. Something that takes the things his character learned/gained in this story, and uses them to help him get past relationship hurdles in the new story. He'd actually be a great flat-arc lead for a spin-off story.

Anyway, all this is to say, this is why this story might leave a bad taste in your mouth, or leave you with a really confused jumble of emotions by the end of it. The story leads you to believe you're reading one type of story, then pulls the rug out from under you about 2/3 of the way through and ends it as a different type of story. Setups without proper payoffs are bad, setups with incorrect payoffs are bad and confusing, this is not any kind of clever subversion of anything, this is just immature writing. I will give the author credit though, (s)he did a brilliant job with the awkward tension at the end of the story and the almost slasher-style horror tone of the scenes where Sunwoo and Jungyeon begin to realize what a horrible train-wreck has begun unfolding.

Well, then. Just to be a completest on the topic -- A comic where this sort of setup is done well (probably) is "Love or Hate" (incomplete, but seems to be circling toward a conclusion finally).

How is what cousin implies he did to Yukihisa in ch2 any different than what the main character did to Yukihisa at the end of ch1? This is firmly entrenched in BL-crazyworld where everyone's gay and are sooo very attracted to the uke that they rape him all the timeeeee. At the end of ch1, we even got a scene transition where Yukihisa's pants and undies were teleported off and the mc was already balls deep in him already gettin' busy. Howabout some foreplay and prep, mister "love at first sight" ?! Just what.

Normally this author writes better than this; there's usually at least some connection between the leads that pulls them together and makes you want to root for them. But here, there's just nothing but a declaration that mc fell in love with someone half his age at first sight with no context, and that person half his age wants nothing to do with him. Laaaaame. I'm gonna have to drop this one here.

This story is almost entirely tropes/stereotypes. The only way it really deviates (in a good way at least) is that the seme doesn't immediately sex-up the uke after rescuing the uke from sexual assault. But otherwise, this doesn't really deviate from the BL-HSers-loaner-uke-is-prostitute script.

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More care should've been put into the uke's backstory, his personality given his situation, context to how he met Maze-san specifically (as opposed to anyone else), what specifically Maze-san does, how the uke feels about Maze-san and the situation, what threat Maze-san really, actually poses. I feel like the leads got out of the situation with Maze-san (whatever it was) way too easily with little-to-no repercussions, and Maze-san let him go with barely a fight.

Also, provide some backstory/context to the seme to explain why he would reach out over and over to someone who clearly wants to be left alone. Normally kids in HS stick with their social groups and don't really talk to anyone outside of them. This is weird and reality-breaking. The author should've had some incident spark seme's interest in the uke, not just randomly sitting near each other in class.

Furthermore, just because the seme feels bad for the uke's lack of friends and the situation he's stuck in doesn't mean he's suddenly in love with him. Maybe it's because he saw the uke's sexy face and body (eyeroll if so)? Reality doesn't work like this. The author needs to provide a reason, an incident (or set of incidents), or something like this that bring the two closer after the seme becomes aware of the uke's existence.

Also, at the end, did uke move in with seme? How is the uke otherwise going to continue paying for his apartment now that he's no longer a prostitute? How does he pay for high school? Why was he even going to HS if he was being used by ne'er-do-wells as a prostitute? Who will take care of him? These questions need to be addressed for the story to be grounded in the real world. I mean the seme could do these things I guess, but show it. Show him talking to his mom about it and introducing them, etc.

In the end, this story is too paint-by-numbers to really be compelling. Try Yatamomo by Harada for a more interesting read along these lines.

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