beta
the pacing faster than my heart palpitations id at least wanted to see a sneak peek into the past after he found out her death and how he truly felt n shi and not just from dialogues i need to see the crashout visualised
also does gang not get the message!?? the fact you knew she tried to khs 4 times after turning back time but still refuse to let her go like damn.
and its so shallow and its moreso their feelings are like a brief overview like solan “yea he ignored me in the past for a long as time so im still really hurt by that.” like could they show us more of his rejected and how she truly felt in the moment not just a flashback just to build up that pov and emotional turmoil the fl has??
and like him its literally just “yea i drove her to her death and i ignored her so i regret it but dw i gotchu in this life” like??? sir. it dont work like that lmao
also like the plot is so messy??? cause its all over the place rn but yea i get they’ll all have a conclusion but its just too much to let go at once first is the past, then the whole soruk, then some new chick got introduced, then theres like that brief hint of the soruk blood in the walls of the empire or some bs, and then ofc the main characs and their own plot n shi
too much introduced at once
and lemme tell ya not once did this man genuinely grovel or apologise or done anything to “win” her back its always possessive n shi like bravo but cmon man have you not learn anything??
also like the sudden rush of topics like fl about to invest n shi to make her rich and funny moment where the mine collapse lolol but never to be brought up again!?
also the obvious holes on how the dragon life/lifeline works like erm do they just get reincarnated? and have the same mate throughout their whole lifetime like same soul/reborn ykyk bc when she mentioned when he chose a mate he mentioned ab sumn like being stupid and didnt mean to ignore her or was that a hint to their first life idk
and then the whole only one dragon awaken every few centuries but all of a sudden theres 3 mf dragons?? like erm WHAT esp a child?
this fic has potential but gaw dayummm the pacing is so fast and theres too many plot introduced at the same time