beta
1. The world building is shakes. Started off okay,but it's getting worse because MC is feeding us information and "discoveries," she's made in an unsatisfactory manner.
2. Are they cursed or not!? 50/50 chance author will remember that They're supposed to be super intimidating to regular people (see: CP after a while, redhead, maids,etc).
3. "She's just smart!" Is she though??? Like, she can be a bit clever but she she doesn't do anything with good reason,just past knowledge (which COULD'VE AND SHOULD'VE changed at this point!). She doesn't explain herself very well,and when she does it's with knowledge that she clearly isn't supposed to have/ be able to pick up yet. Sir,why are you just letting this child participate in criminal-catching?
4. Baby talk other no baby talk,? Make up your mind.
5. Why did they need a daughter for a month? Haven't found the reason yet. This+ the fact that no one's actually charming. It's very forced.
I've spoiled nothing ,but what I AM going to spoil is this: it sucks.