This was really cute and I loved the flow in the earlier chapters. But later it got kind of dragged out and overly dramatic. It also should have had maybe 1 or 2 more chapters to wrap the story up and some aftermath. I just think it could have been done much better but I like the start of the story a lot!
Why do y'all keep commenting about ZoSan on a ZoLu doujinshi?? Just go to your precious ZoSan doujins and comment there about your love for your ship if you can't deal with Zoro being with someone else. You're ruining the mood in the comments. I wanted to see love for this ship but all I see is "ZoSan!!" or "wut Luffy seme?? No ew" ...
I actually prefer Luffy on top 'cuz when he's a bottom he's usually way too timid, cute and out of character.
Not sure why but I had been suspecting from the very beginning that Seno was just pretending to be Hakushima because he loved Natsuka. So I could never relax while reading. I think that Natsukas transition from loving Hakushima to Seno was a bit too quick, but overall it was interesting.