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spending all this time talking about spells when theres almost no reason to, how they work and what they're called doesnt seem to be at all important to the plot, so why bother with it. youve got an entire page of people shouting spells and for what? they don't actually do anything so you waste an entire page. this could be a good story but it feels like the author is more interested in what they think is cool (the spells) and not what actually would make this interesting (getting to the fucking point)