beta
You know what? I see the vision—the creativity that this story want to execute well... But as u can see, they're having a hard time doing that—the pacing isn't the smoothest, it's a bit rough as if instead of revising they accidentally present us the outline and the draft only... You guys get me?
It was fun and entertaining at first, but then suddenly the pacing got ruined. As the story unfolds, too much is happening all at once to the point that we can't focused on ANY of the problem at all.
I hope sooner or later they'll be able to pick up the right pacing again and we'll have a smooth transition and highlights for every arc.
P.s. i really like the silver hair dude, if this is gonna have romance genre then I'm rooting for him as the ml (tho they're still too young so I HOPE THEY WON'T FOCUS ON ROMANCE YET)