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I might just be having a bad day, but the way she keeps reiterating everything shes doing and whats gonna happen is crazy annoying. Like.. she repeated shes "gonna die tomorrow if she doesnt do anything" three times! Like seriously, I think the readers KNOW. Its not that hard to leave some things for the audience to figure out themselves without her having to say it. The line "i hurt my foot earlier so i have to bandage it because it's throbbing" is also like, just... WHY?? No need for that line, "the door seems like it blends in with the wall so nobody would notice it" except you i guess because howd you know??