I like the story and I like the graphics, the uke is very cute and in term of writing a blackmail is the way for a uke in a bl to accept sex without telling he wants sex. (Thus remaining « pure »). It’s just a narrative trick that many of you do not understand.
Anyway my biggest concern is … the toilet kink that many Japanese authors have.
There is just no way for me, living in Europe, that a dirty public toilet will arouse me, nooooo way. Maybe the Japanese toilet kink exist because their toilets are cleaner than a public toilet in Europe, but going in the middle of work to the toilets to masturbate is just so… meeeh.
A oneshot is too short. Ok so the story should goes like this according to me : seme realised that when he saw teacher fu… his girl he was in fact being excited by the teacher expression. Then a whole chapter about teacher and student having sex and teacher slowly realising that he likes doing it with his student. Then another whole chapter about miscommunication between them and their feeling. There the comments should change from « rape is so bad look at me I’m the purest here » to « communication is very important in a couple relationship, I’m so smart for stating the obvious » Then a love rival from the teacher side, that triggers seme to realise his own feelings, there the comments will change again to « I don’t like this bit* rival, (good job author) and it lasts one or two chapters, then they finally get on same love level and have sex in a hotel. Then extra, we see them three years laters, they are still a couple and very happy with lot of consensual sex. End. Yes I’ve read too many yaois ha ha ha
The official translation is so much better than the non official of the same chapter, I could finish the chapter.
I still think that the manga artist never saw a real tululu because it looks like a leg ha ha ha, but if it’s her thing why not :).
Dirty talk in a novel is very erotic, because as a reader, you can imagine what you want around it, but in a comic you really have to find the fragile tension point :not too much, but not too few. Here it looks like the artist had a text and she just draw the text without adapting it for a visual moment, thus it makes it awkward and a turn of. Although I know it is also very hard to draw silence.
I’ll wait for the next official chapters to read how the story develops so far!
I am probably very rude by saying this, but the translation is weird. I’m sorry , the translator is probably doing her best (thank you by the way) and yet I have trouble with the dialogues. Also, I think the translator loves very much the manwha because she puts a personal comment on every dialogues, which I find cute but still a little bit too much. There was a translator who put all of her (funny and cute) comments at the end of a translated chapter, with notes and meme, that was very cute and not intrusive. Thank you anyway for the new chapters!
The seme is talking so much while doing it… I get it, it’s dirty talk, but either the translation is strange or he’s babbling weird stuff during sex.
The art is still as good as always, I like it! The seme is non redemptional, no sorry, no « please I will change for your love » and I also think that non apologetic people who stand on their ground might be interesting. I didn’t read the entire novel so let’s wait and see where the story leads.
I like the story, I looove the art, the author knows really well human anatomy, the skin colours, really well done! (The background not so much, why?) although like in most yaoi the dicks are way too huge and not proportional with the body (come on they have a third leg instead of a dick, sometimes it is just way too much) « oh my god it’s sooo big! How will it fit! ». I hope there will be a character development though, but I don’t really see how the mc falls in love with his love interest, it seems to me a little bit too easy, but also on the same time if the love interest suddenly realises that he loves the MC out of nowhere I would feel it would be a little bit strange. Let’s hope that the story keep getting interesting.
When you are drawing, the placement of your character is very important. Look at the MC he is in the stairs, that means he has the upper hand in the conversation. He is in power here.