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A oneshot is too short. Ok so the story should goes like this according to me : seme realised that when he saw teacher fu… his girl he was in fact being excited by the teacher expression. Then a whole chapter about teacher and student having sex and teacher slowly realising that he likes doing it with his student. Then another whole chapter about miscommunication between them and their feeling. There the comments should change from « rape is so bad look at me I’m the purest here » to « communication is very important in a couple relationship, I’m so smart for stating the obvious » Then a love rival from the teacher side, that triggers seme to realise his own feelings, there the comments will change again to « I don’t like this bit* rival, (good job author) and it lasts one or two chapters, then they finally get on same love level and have sex in a hotel. Then extra, we see them three years laters, they are still a couple and very happy with lot of consensual sex. End. Yes I’ve read too many yaois ha ha ha
I like the story and I like the graphics, the uke is very cute and in term of writing a blackmail is the way for a uke in a bl to accept sex without telling he wants sex. (Thus remaining « pure »). It’s just a narrative trick that many of you do not understand.
Anyway my biggest concern is … the toilet kink that many Japanese authors have.
There is just no way for me, living in Europe, that a dirty public toilet will arouse me, nooooo way. Maybe the Japanese toilet kink exist because their toilets are cleaner than a public toilet in Europe, but going in the middle of work to the toilets to masturbate is just so… meeeh.