beta
this story was so cute and funny!!! wtf noooo ┗( T﹏T )┛ so OOC too... also rape is not equivalent "payback" for scamming someone LMAO, i have no clue what the author was thinking. absolutely insane shit. fucking BLOOD??? genuinely disturbing, seme is psycho, this story has zero appeal now. i wish the uke had been way meaner all along lol
aesthetically, this is very fresh and interesting. but i think the author is coasting on that a lil bit too much... the plot should have taken off by now, but there really isn't one. i think a slow burn would have worked better for a story like this. it just feels rushed and underdeveloped. and the sexual tension being broken by dream scenes/jerking off kind of ruined what the story had been building towards.
IDK, it's fine. i'm just a bit disappointed. this story should be so much more tender than it is now. i will keep reading, and i hope the story proves me wrong. i really want it to win me back lol