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This story had a good concept but poor execution. It feels disjointed and decides to focus on all the wrong areas. The end is a prime example- it spends a lengthy time tying up a subplot, and then a handful of panels on the main couple. :S

Set up and no delivery.

Everything that is introduced is treated like a thruway line, brought back only when needed.

If you want to try sexual choking please do NOT do it this way. You should apply pressure to the SIDES of the neck!! The goal is not to damage the windpipe. Doing it the way shown is suuuuuuuper dangerous!

It is a beginner misconception you are supposed to crush the airpipe. What you want to do is squeeze the sides of the neck. It is the blood flow being interrupted and then returned that brings euphoria. The actual air being withheld is more of a side effect due to positioning of such arteries.

(I am not complaining about it being put in story this way, or saying it is unrealistic- it's just a super duper big no for a beginner irl.)

I can't help it... these two make me think of San and Wooyoung from Ateez. And I'm sooooo here for it. xD

I... don't get MC's behavior. O.o He is aware supernatural exists and that he is at risk.

Yet he repeatedly sees/hears/feels things that are CLEARLY supernatural and his response is allllllways "huh, that's weird. what's this?" and proceeds to act like a character in a scary movie that goes to examine a sound while being chased by a killer. Like... what? I don't... does he keep getting brainwashed? Is that it? Is every single thing supernatural able to turn your thinking skills off?

If so, that's going to make for one hella boring read. An MC who can do nothing but mindlessly follow a sirens call. Wow. Riveting. :/

He is super rich and has never been in a relationship.Exercise and romance. He tried it for the firs...

The LAST person who would run away without contact is a former SECRETARRRRRRY!

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The pacing of this story is really.... dragging. It's to the point that I can't remember the last chapter that didn't feel like filler. By a few chapters in, only one sentence per chapter has any sort of impact on the story and the rest is just rehashing what we know.

It's the sort of pacing that makes me feel like we were supposed to be seeing 2 POVs, with 1 furthering the plot and the other filling it out. What we got was only the 2nd pov that offers fluff. It's like things are going on behind the scenes and we are meant to see it as intriguing, but with the lack of any depth to the main story it instead feels hollow.

It's like things happen to and around MC and we see his reactions. We don't see him actually prepare, plan or do anything. Even when it comes to thinking his mind is one track and circles to the same things. He doesn't personally push the story forward. It's more like he's along for the ride and we are watching the fallout.

I do like the concept, art and think the dialog is written well. It's just the pacing and placement of content that kills the heartbeat here for me. I would give it a try as a novel, since I feel like most of what is missing would be easier to convey.

I'm venting- not saying I dislike the story in any way. I'm only miffed because I do enjoy it, so please don't take this as me bashing it!


Whhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhy would MC here behave in such a stupid way. I mean, honestly. This makes 0 sense.

He specifically thinks about evidence, not startling the fella and approaching this wisely. He has heavy suspicions about this guy to the point he is concerned enough to consider entering his home. He is clearly not the type to act first think later...

And then he agrees to be alone in a closed space without informing anyone - with the guy he suspects? The guy gives him an off feeling yet he goes along with it like some dopey puppy. It's so weird. Especially since MC then notices again how weird guy is being, and just like... shrugs it off? This whole interaction is just so weirdly paced.

Offers to help the next day, is turned down. Then guy is suddenly like, actually you can help me- let's do it now? That's not weird? Like really? Even in different circumstances that is hella weird. Dude suddenly arrives home, you haven't seen him in days and he admits to being gone- and then within him getting home, despite not expecting you, he's ready to pack? Like that just makes no sense.

And then he frigging whips out his camera as he essentially scoops in front of this guy?! I'm sorry, but where did his awareness go? Where is the guy who was alert enough to realize this guy is a weirdo in the first place?

I just... if I type out step by step what happened in this chapter it drives me bonkers. I do not get it and it was just so unexpected. I'm irrationally irked.

But in the way where you yell at a TV during a movie. I'm not saying it's bad, since clearly I was invested enough to get miffed at this.

Feel conflicted, because I want to like this and there are so many aspects I enjoy. But then certain things just keep rubbing me the wrong way and, well, now I'm raw and tired of it.

I'm not saying this is bad, or that it's the author-same doing. This is fiction, so it shouldn't be held to the standards of reality.

It's just that having MC repeatedly painted as a weak character (mentally and physically) with a major health condition - only for him to be tossed around like a ragdoll without repercussion? It just creates this disconnect every time it's brought up, which is soooo often.

Not saying MC is poorly written, or that he doesn't have his strengths! He does. There is complexity, his character isn't shoehorned into "someone with health issues."

It's more the repetition with which is brought up, regardless of seeing how rough he is consistently being treated. Yes- the author does occasionally show it having an effect on him. But, it feels more like a reminder of "look, he is sick" with how fleeting it is.

Maybe it's because I'm a visual reader. I compare it to having a movie that takes place during a monsoon yet nothing is ever shown to be wet. They constantly bring up the storm, and even have characters come in from outdoors mentioning how heavy their clothes are with water- yet they are bone dry. They go through the motion of wringing out their shirt, but it's like it never happened when they sit on the couch the next moment- as if they wouldn't soak the fabric.

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I agree fella needs to be punished.

However... this was not the right way. XD This is how you CREATE an antagonist! Fella was loyal enough to leave and vow his silence, refusing money in an attempt to show it. His anger was directed at himself failing at that point.

But then ML just had to go and give this guy a reason to want revenge on him? To have hostility towards the wizard?! Seems like a bad move.

Like punish him and strip his memory. If you can remove his peen you can remove/muddle with his memory.

Maybe I'm just paranoid. Or maybe he did that and we just weren't shown it.

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Feels like this should have remained a novel. That, or a looottt more time needed to go into the pacing of this webcomic. It feels like everything happens so very quickly in a disjointed manner.

Things don't have time to take hold. I find myself wondering "what is happening?" only for the scene to drastically shift again and leave me lost.

Chapter 17 should have been split into multiple chapters. You can't have a "plot shifting" important series of events all take place within 1 chapter and expect it to feel satisfying! By chapter 18 I felt like I'd been bamboozled.

This has the bones of an interesting read. Unfortunately it doesn't deliver.

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This is decent, it just has a few things that irk me.

The primary annoyance for me is the fact that MC being colorblind and ML being scentblind is poorly utilized. It comes up so very rarely I forget it's even an aspect of the story. This could have given much more content to the plot if utilized properly. The fact they both needed to struggle in their fields would be great bonding fodder. Instead it's used in a minor conversation and never brought up again.

This would be the same story without them being color/scentblind.