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I started out enjoying this, but the last 10 chapters have just felt like the story is dragging it's feet. I don't feel any real interest in continuing because it feels so... static and predictable?

The story is based around the game/guild community but shows very little understanding about what that actually entails. It makes it feel really outta place for someone who is actually a hard-core gamer. In the beginning that was fine. I figured the "game" aspect was just an extra setting flare. But no. They revolve everything around in game drama etc yet it's written like it's by someone who has never gamed. (It feels like watching someone pretend they play basketball, only to see they never dribble the ball.)

It wouldn't bother me so much if the story felt so one note. MC is blushy and easy to rile. ML is pushy and easy to amuse. That's it. One says "stop touching me" and the other goes "I'm not touching you." That essentially the entire story, repeated again and again through small actions.

The art is good. The characters are relatively likeable. The dialogue is cohesive and humorous. Overall this isn't a bad story! I can see why one may enjoy it. It's a good fluff read. Characters are enjoyable.

As an avid gamer, however, this left me feeling annoyed despite having cute moments.

Yoo Sanghyun, once the youngest champion in a national archery competition and a highly promising ta...

[Translated by Mosh Scans]Born as an orphan, National figure skater Yi-rim, has always craved for so...

I agree fella needs to be punished.

However... this was not the right way. XD This is how you CREATE an antagonist! Fella was loyal enough to leave and vow his silence, refusing money in an attempt to show it. His anger was directed at himself failing at that point.

But then ML just had to go and give this guy a reason to want revenge on him? To have hostility towards the wizard?! Seems like a bad move.

Like punish him and strip his memory. If you can remove his peen you can remove/muddle with his memory.

Maybe I'm just paranoid. Or maybe he did that and we just weren't shown it.

Yoon Wooyoung, the youngest son of a wealthy family. Money, education, appearance, everything's...

Gang fights and Yakuza dabblings. Sophomores versus seniors. Blood, rape and power. Mayhem rules Kis...

Feels like this should have remained a novel. That, or a looottt more time needed to go into the pacing of this webcomic. It feels like everything happens so very quickly in a disjointed manner.

Things don't have time to take hold. I find myself wondering "what is happening?" only for the scene to drastically shift again and leave me lost.

Chapter 17 should have been split into multiple chapters. You can't have a "plot shifting" important series of events all take place within 1 chapter and expect it to feel satisfying! By chapter 18 I felt like I'd been bamboozled.

This has the bones of an interesting read. Unfortunately it doesn't deliver.

Kuno Shio, who is half human and half alien, has a "glitch" that causes his body to turn into a gel-...

The main character has the ability to read other people’s thoughts and feelings as written tex...

This is decent, it just has a few things that irk me.

The primary annoyance for me is the fact that MC being colorblind and ML being scentblind is poorly utilized. It comes up so very rarely I forget it's even an aspect of the story. This could have given much more content to the plot if utilized properly. The fact they both needed to struggle in their fields would be great bonding fodder. Instead it's used in a minor conversation and never brought up again.

This would be the same story without them being color/scentblind.

On a dark and snowy night, Sho-an drags home what he believes to be the corpse of a beautiful man. B...

Arata's a college student working as a "big brother for rent." One day, he meets his ...

This is good yet felt unsatisfying at the same time. Art is good, plot is nice and characters are interesting. However... it has a heavy tone that it doesn't quite deliver on. It feels like it should have been quite a bit longer.

It has topics such as death, rape, abuse, neglect and more yet they are handled so lightly. They will be touched on, the depth occasionally acknowledged, and then moved on from instantly. This feels unfufilling.

There are also a number of things that feel as if they've been left unanswered, but in a way it felt like they were forgotten about.

Basically- it feels like a full length novel was condensed into a short story. Enjoyable but like something is missing.

This feels like a writer had a bunch of scenes in mind and forcibly tied them together. It's less about a plot/story and more about "exciting" scenes playing out. It would be fine if it didn't present itself as a deeper story. The amount of inner dialogue makes it appear as of the author wanted this to have feelings attached, but that is all thrown out by how the characters interact.

I mean.... really? The trope that gets this rolling is a "straight" guy going to "teach" his gay friend how to have sex? What? That doesn't even make pretend sense. That's like saying I'll teach someone how to be vegan by feeding them meat. It makes no sense.

In a world where the Han Empire never fell, martial arts is a power used to squeeze the people dry. ...

This strikes me as a writer who had a bunch of scenes in mind but didn't consider how to make them cohesive. Everything is very fast paced and jarring. You don't have a chance to connect to any of the characters before a new one is introduced... and then another. :S Everything that happened within 15 chapters could have made for a compelling story if it had been spread out to maybe 50 or so. This would have given time for things to build and for us to get an idea/opinion on characters.

But no. It goes from "thoughtful guy who gave space to uncle/nephew" to a sudden "yelling and accusing partner, most likely hot headed."

Then "infatuated because uncle has a nice body" to suddenly "protective, standing up for uncle, borderline lovesick behavior, annnd acting like he knows everyone involved and calling out others faults."

Oh and "friend with unrequited love for years who always acted like a stable rock and source of advice" to "yelling at uncle, looking at him like he's a whore and passing instant judgments."

Like, how much of a yoyo can these characters be? The writer clearly had an idea about the characters when coming up with the story... only to not share any of it with us.

It changed so much that I thought I missed a 5 year timeskip or something. Characters look older, and have lost facial range. Expressions feel very cookie cutter, whereas in season 1 they had feeling put into it. I tried to keep going... but I feel a strong disconnect now.

It's not that the art is "bad" it's just very different from season 1. So much so that it gives the story a different vibe. If it started out with this art I don't think it'd feel so jarring. But the change totally switched up the reading expierence for me. I feel less connected to the characters, their emotions and the plot overall. It just strikes me as a bit hollow and unfinished.

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From Good Girls Scans BL:“Shall we get married?” — A fake marriage between two men...

This makes me think of a first time author who jotted down a bunch of ideas and was determined to fit all of them in. It leads to fast pacing, overused cliches and awkward characters. It feels like it wasn't well thought out, and instead has been rushed to completion. Just another MC who activley works towards changing a plot only to... be suprised/worried the plot is changing

I can already see the checklist
-cold ML who falls for FL instantly, despite notoriously not liking women
-cold ML who is only warm to FL (for some reason this is supposed to show how special FL is, instead of the reality ML is self centered)
-ML is so crazy for FL he is obsessive/possesive, (cuz apparently that's supposed to be "sweet")
-contract relationship with time limit (that will constantly be mentioned)
-FL takes over evil woman, begins acting nice
-abused child who is suddenly treated well (since trauma is apparently easily fixed with a smile)
-Prince who likes/needs FL (because we need royal drama)
-magic that is unique to FL (need some excuse for her to be relevant, after all)
-FL starts to fall for ML, but thinks he doesn't like her (again, need drama)
-ML likes FL but won't just say it until much later (I guess honesty is less entertaining than season long miscommunication/misunderstandings)

Art is pretty tho. Gotta at least give em that.