It's decent in terms of the outcome.... but the execution of it all is really sloppy.
It feels rushed and like she simply stumbled into it. If it was that easy to get rid of him, then why did it take soooo darn long? She didn't succeed through a smart plan: things went wrong yet magically fell into place. Feels really hollow to me.
I get that this was a smut first and plot comes second, if that, kind of story but... building so much dislike around a character for such an u rewarding send off is pretty disappointing. Feels like the author got tired and decided to wrap things up as quick as possible.
What type of misunderstanding warrants this?! Are they going to make us believe it's because MC didn't want "ML" to get adopted?
Guy who is your friend and you rely on doesn't want a certain family to adopt an omega.... maybe it's because that famy is bad news?! Please tell me this isn't all it takes. If this is the misunderstanding, a simple MC trying to protect ML being misunderstood? If so that's hella lazy writing.
Because how does it make sense you would trust/care about someone enough to be hellbent on getting revenge, but not even bother to make sure your assumption about them is correct? How do you make that jump with direct proof they were involved?
For example: If I was kidnapped and was told "your husband sold you to us" well... I wouldn't believe it. Unless I saw video evidence, or him in person, conducting the sale- I'd consider it the lamest attempt at turning me against him. Why? Because our history together let's me know that would never happen.
So how can ML trust/care about MC sooooo much that he wants to get this crazy revenge and yet put 0 time thinking or caring about why MC has been looking for him? Like, that is such a forced misunderstanding- if that's what it's supposed to be. MC is literally crying out his name and willing to do whatever to find Mido. So all ML has to do is ask why? Why do you want to find him?
But no. Instead it is a stupid rapefest every damn chapter. This feels like "No Reason" all over again.
Omg thanks you so much you're so fuckin right
NO that is absolutely not the reason. What happens is he’s being sold off to a family as a child prostitute and the MC does not agree with it
Right- MC doesn't want him to be "adopted" by a bad "family." I used the term adopted, because that's what the orphanage would refer to it as to the other children if they asked about where he went. MC was trying to protect the ML. From the flashback, it appears ML misunderstood this as the MC not wanting him to get adopted.
What I was saying is that, if this is the misunderstanding (ML thinking MC didn't want him to get adopted, when in reality MC was against ML getting sold off) then it's not really compelling and could easily be cleared up.
It’s not that I can explain but it would give spoilers regardless if spoilers though the ML really has zero justification for his rape
I agree- there's no justification for it, or rape in general!
I am not the best as communicating via text, so maybe I did a poor job at wording things. I did try to include "if that is what it's supposed to be" in refrence to this being the misunderstanding in question, as I can only go off what has been implied thus far. My comment was meant to imply that, if this is the misunderstanding at play- it could easily be cleared up, thus ML's actions are even more difficult to see. I'm just going off of what has been portrayed so far. Which appears to be that ML blames MC for his predicament in his younger years, where in reality MC was always trying to protect ML and isn't responsible.
Essentially I'm saying ML is in the wrong, and that it's odd he cares enough to hate ML to the point of going through this deranged revenge - when he doesn't seem to care enough to clarify if MC is even to be blamed. It just seems odd to harbor such hatred without ML putting any thought put into seeing if his misunderstanding is even correct.
You make perfect sense don’t worry
I agree w everything you said, his revenge feels painfully forced.Like you said it’s confusing how he can be so obsessed with getting revenge but everything else goes out the other ear. him and MC should’ve teamed up and get revenge on the people that ACTUALLY harmed ML.
I’m only reading it for the good art rn. I get ML has been through some extremely traumatic shit but I hope he finds out the truth sooner than later and feel some regret.
This had the ingredients needed for a recipe that would make a good yaoi... until it was ruined with the non-con. It makes it difficult to like the Seme when he is constantly strong-arming the Uke.
All those good ingredients- humor, misunderstanding trope, contrasting personality of introver vs extrovert, dual animal lovers.... and then the undercooked meat is the apparent necessity to have non-con sex served up consistently. Why?! There was an actual chance and laid out set up to have these two bond normally. Instead it goes the direction of having Seme come across as both sex crazed and boundry breaking. He has traits that should be likeable simply shattered by his behavior.
It feels like the writer was too impatient to flesh out a scenario where the two characters could have consensual sex, and resorted to forced non-con to "get the plot moving."
I wanted to enjoy this. I even started to envision the ways this could have gone. Instead of that, I was met with disappointment as soon as it went the forced route, and became fed up when it resorted to sticking to it. Now all I can envision this story ending up as is the miserable trope of a forced Uke suddenly "getting hooked on sex" and giving in to the bully Seme, with a forced "happy ending" at the end that is supposed to be believable- when in reality that's not how things work. I get that it's fiction, sure. But that kind of overplayed and heavy handed plotline is too brain numbing for me to want to continue.
AHHHHHH not to mention such a nice character design i wished it took a turn for the sweet romantic trope instead
I swear this is literally what im talking about like this had so much potential and for what? They wasted the characters and the plot for literally nothing like im so disappointed because the outcome would’ve been so good
Ch 126 felt so out of place and disappointing. O.o What is with this sudden "gloss over events, poorly summarize what happened, ope time for a time-skip!" It just feels so poorly placed to suddenly throw this at us. These events have been built up over chapters, with breadcrumbs consistently being laid, only for... a paltry summary? It feels so out of place!
I surmise there will be "flash backs" to this time we just skipped to fill us in. However, that simply feels cheap after sooooo many chapters of build up. It feels like the artist was tired and didn't want to draw battle scenes so they simply skimmed over everything and wrapped it up with "this happe d, that happened, now moving on!"
I'm going to wait until at least ch146 to pick this one back up. If I try sticking with weekly updates, with the way the story is now, I'll only become more frustrated than I already am.
This is fast paced in a very jarring way. It feels like someone had an idea and made a rough outline... then pushed forward to get it finished as-is. It's a shame since the art is quite pretty!
The chapters are short and each one feels like half of the panels have simply been omitted. It gives a sort of whiplash that leaves "did I miss something?" constantly ringing in my head. Things happen simply to happen. I tried to keep reading to see if it got any better; it didn't. The entire story feels like a jigsaw puzzle that was forced together leaving gaps between every piece.
To top it all off it's full of non-con/r*pe! There is so much of it that it leaves me wondering if I'm supposed to like any of the characters, or if the intent was simply to write out some half-baked dirty fantasy.
Overall it feels clumsy.
The translations are a bit all over the place. This didn't seem to get much of a proof-read before being posted. Genders get switched around, words left out, some bubbles are empty or repeated, and overall a lot is lost in the translations. It feels a bit like it was machine translated without anyone to look over it.
Right!? I got so confused when the gladiator knight’s sister turned into a brother
Why did it have to go the full blow rape with a bleeding arsehole route?! "We love you, so let us get you drunk and then use you like an object with no care for your wellbeing," is such an unneeded aspect to add into this. Why throw in the whole "love" word when they are more focused on their own physical pleasure than his? It would have been perfectly fine if they went the drunken "mistake" route where they coerced him into it type of noncon. But nopppppe. They go the rape with no regard for his body's health route. A torn anus and undoubted hemmroids for the poor Uke in this one. :(