I agree fella needs to be punished.
However... this was not the right way. XD This is how you CREATE an antagonist! Fella was loyal enough to leave and vow his silence, refusing money in an attempt to show it. His anger was directed at himself failing at that point.
But then ML just had to go and give this guy a reason to want revenge on him? To have hostility towards the wizard?! Seems like a bad move.
Like punish him and strip his memory. If you can remove his peen you can remove/muddle with his memory.
Maybe I'm just paranoid. Or maybe he did that and we just weren't shown it.
Hey he didn’t get killed. Be glad he bottom magic done instead lmaoooooooooooo
If he got killed it would be preferable, as then he wouldn't have the opportunity to harbor resentment. I was more concerned that he just created seeds for this guy to want revenge.
It’s a webcomic let the author have some fun.
It's a webcomic let the reader have opinions.
Usually, this is the seed to a side couple and a sign that he's gonna be the next bottom, dunno though
I can see how someone would feel that way!
To me, leaving him excommunicated is a more logical door for side-couple. He has all the key factors needed: showed interest in men, heartbroken, in need of a place to belong, and previously devoted. Him being won over by a uke, accepting his lingering feelings towards MC are admiration, and then settling down content.
The way it went leans more towards creating a villain who will show back up. I get the vibe MC will be pushed to kill him at some point. (Or let ML kill him, or feel torn that ML had to kill him.) Gives me more "plot device" and less "spin off."
BUT, I am by no means trying to say "you're wrong," just sharing my take. I can definitely see how there could still be spin-off potential, it's just not where my mind instantly went.
Feels like this should have remained a novel. That, or a looottt more time needed to go into the pacing of this webcomic. It feels like everything happens so very quickly in a disjointed manner.
Things don't have time to take hold. I find myself wondering "what is happening?" only for the scene to drastically shift again and leave me lost.
Chapter 17 should have been split into multiple chapters. You can't have a "plot shifting" important series of events all take place within 1 chapter and expect it to feel satisfying! By chapter 18 I felt like I'd been bamboozled.
This has the bones of an interesting read. Unfortunately it doesn't deliver.
This is decent, it just has a few things that irk me.
The primary annoyance for me is the fact that MC being colorblind and ML being scentblind is poorly utilized. It comes up so very rarely I forget it's even an aspect of the story. This could have given much more content to the plot if utilized properly. The fact they both needed to struggle in their fields would be great bonding fodder. Instead it's used in a minor conversation and never brought up again.
This would be the same story without them being color/scentblind.
This is good yet felt unsatisfying at the same time. Art is good, plot is nice and characters are interesting. However... it has a heavy tone that it doesn't quite deliver on. It feels like it should have been quite a bit longer.
It has topics such as death, rape, abuse, neglect and more yet they are handled so lightly. They will be touched on, the depth occasionally acknowledged, and then moved on from instantly. This feels unfufilling.
There are also a number of things that feel as if they've been left unanswered, but in a way it felt like they were forgotten about.
Basically- it feels like a full length novel was condensed into a short story. Enjoyable but like something is missing.
Is it a novel adaptation ?
I don't believe so; summary says "Original Webcomic."
damn now I'm not too sure I want to read it
Yes, i agree. It was shocking to me how they ignored the rape like it was never happened. Like the author didn't even mentioned it at all
This feels like a writer had a bunch of scenes in mind and forcibly tied them together. It's less about a plot/story and more about "exciting" scenes playing out. It would be fine if it didn't present itself as a deeper story. The amount of inner dialogue makes it appear as of the author wanted this to have feelings attached, but that is all thrown out by how the characters interact.
I mean.... really? The trope that gets this rolling is a "straight" guy going to "teach" his gay friend how to have sex? What? That doesn't even make pretend sense. That's like saying I'll teach someone how to be vegan by feeding them meat. It makes no sense.
This strikes me as a writer who had a bunch of scenes in mind but didn't consider how to make them cohesive. Everything is very fast paced and jarring. You don't have a chance to connect to any of the characters before a new one is introduced... and then another. :S Everything that happened within 15 chapters could have made for a compelling story if it had been spread out to maybe 50 or so. This would have given time for things to build and for us to get an idea/opinion on characters.
But no. It goes from "thoughtful guy who gave space to uncle/nephew" to a sudden "yelling and accusing partner, most likely hot headed."
Then "infatuated because uncle has a nice body" to suddenly "protective, standing up for uncle, borderline lovesick behavior, annnd acting like he knows everyone involved and calling out others faults."
Oh and "friend with unrequited love for years who always acted like a stable rock and source of advice" to "yelling at uncle, looking at him like he's a whore and passing instant judgments."
Like, how much of a yoyo can these characters be? The writer clearly had an idea about the characters when coming up with the story... only to not share any of it with us.
You took the words right out my mouth, thank you for explaining so clearly because it was just that..
Its wayyyyyy to fast paced
Seriously.. just the characterization is making no sense?! It's such a a cheap cop out to try and justify the end game. I'm really glad most readers feel the same
It changed so much that I thought I missed a 5 year timeskip or something. Characters look older, and have lost facial range. Expressions feel very cookie cutter, whereas in season 1 they had feeling put into it. I tried to keep going... but I feel a strong disconnect now.
It's not that the art is "bad" it's just very different from season 1. So much so that it gives the story a different vibe. If it started out with this art I don't think it'd feel so jarring. But the change totally switched up the reading expierence for me. I feel less connected to the characters, their emotions and the plot overall. It just strikes me as a bit hollow and unfinished.
This makes me think of a first time author who jotted down a bunch of ideas and was determined to fit all of them in. It leads to fast pacing, overused cliches and awkward characters. It feels like it wasn't well thought out, and instead has been rushed to completion. Just another MC who activley works towards changing a plot only to... be suprised/worried the plot is changing
I can already see the checklist
-cold ML who falls for FL instantly, despite notoriously not liking women
-cold ML who is only warm to FL (for some reason this is supposed to show how special FL is, instead of the reality ML is self centered)
-ML is so crazy for FL he is obsessive/possesive, (cuz apparently that's supposed to be "sweet")
-contract relationship with time limit (that will constantly be mentioned)
-FL takes over evil woman, begins acting nice
-abused child who is suddenly treated well (since trauma is apparently easily fixed with a smile)
-Prince who likes/needs FL (because we need royal drama)
-magic that is unique to FL (need some excuse for her to be relevant, after all)
-FL starts to fall for ML, but thinks he doesn't like her (again, need drama)
-ML likes FL but won't just say it until much later (I guess honesty is less entertaining than season long miscommunication/misunderstandings)
Art is pretty tho. Gotta at least give em that.
Yupp.. Hope the author grow and write better in the future.. Bcuz people always starts somewhere.. Too bad tho.. I like stories with loving parents and kids.. Plus getting super dried off reading materials... Hope more good ones will show up soon
Cute art and characters, that's for sure!
However... I wish it wasn't so short. It really left me feeling like this was an unfinished draft that was changed into a short story. No character development, no real info on the characters in general- just short fluff. I can tell the writer put thought into it from the author's note... so it would have been nice to see that realized.
As pretty and cute as it was, I felt rather meh about it. MC felt very childish and only gets his way through his tears. He comes across as a total child. I understand that ML finds that "endearing" but as a reader it feels kinda off putting. All I can think of MC as is a manchild who would need ML to play the mommy role. It just reminds me of all the women complaining that their men expect them to do everyyyything to the point of feeling like a mom. xD
I wish this was at least 20 chapters and that they touched on A) MC taking care of himself like an adult B) brief explanation of imprinting, or hinting that they imprinted C) ML voicing his thoughts D) MC doing something to show ML he cares for him beyond just crying.
Feel conflicted, because I want to like this and there are so many aspects I enjoy. But then certain things just keep rubbing me the wrong way and, well, now I'm raw and tired of it.
I'm not saying this is bad, or that it's the author-same doing. This is fiction, so it shouldn't be held to the standards of reality.
It's just that having MC repeatedly painted as a weak character (mentally and physically) with a major health condition - only for him to be tossed around like a ragdoll without repercussion? It just creates this disconnect every time it's brought up, which is soooo often.
Not saying MC is poorly written, or that he doesn't have his strengths! He does. There is complexity, his character isn't shoehorned into "someone with health issues."
It's more the repetition with which is brought up, regardless of seeing how rough he is consistently being treated. Yes- the author does occasionally show it having an effect on him. But, it feels more like a reminder of "look, he is sick" with how fleeting it is.
Maybe it's because I'm a visual reader. I compare it to having a movie that takes place during a monsoon yet nothing is ever shown to be wet. They constantly bring up the storm, and even have characters come in from outdoors mentioning how heavy their clothes are with water- yet they are bone dry. They go through the motion of wringing out their shirt, but it's like it never happened when they sit on the couch the next moment- as if they wouldn't soak the fabric.