If you want to try sexual choking please do NOT do it this way. You should apply pressure to the SIDES of the neck!! The goal is not to damage the windpipe. Doing it the way shown is suuuuuuuper dangerous!
It is a beginner misconception you are supposed to crush the airpipe. What you want to do is squeeze the sides of the neck. It is the blood flow being interrupted and then returned that brings euphoria. The actual air being withheld is more of a side effect due to positioning of such arteries.
(I am not complaining about it being put in story this way, or saying it is unrealistic- it's just a super duper big no for a beginner irl.)
I can't help it... these two make me think of San and Wooyoung from Ateez. And I'm sooooo here for it. xD
OMGGG YOU'RE SO RIGHT
I... don't get MC's behavior. O.o He is aware supernatural exists and that he is at risk.
Yet he repeatedly sees/hears/feels things that are CLEARLY supernatural and his response is allllllways "huh, that's weird. what's this?" and proceeds to act like a character in a scary movie that goes to examine a sound while being chased by a killer. Like... what? I don't... does he keep getting brainwashed? Is that it? Is every single thing supernatural able to turn your thinking skills off?
If so, that's going to make for one hella boring read. An MC who can do nothing but mindlessly follow a sirens call. Wow. Riveting. :/
from my understanding he seems to be momentarily in a trances?? like theres no way he would just talk to and jump off bc theres some giant ass goldfish talking to him but you never know anymore w these damn ukes
So true!
What did he do for MC that is considered "going so far" for him? Piano disposal is expensive. If anything, he did the father a favor by taking a piano the man wanted gone. O.o Am I missing something here? Like... it was something set to be disposed of. It's not like he went out of his way to convince the father to let go of an heirloom.
I got all hopeful for the incoming communication... only for this chapter.
It's better than nothing. But, well uh, it lost any impact for me with how it progressed. I felt awkward with the following scenes, wondering if maybe panels were missing only to realize they weren't.
Why have that topic discussed to not have MC say a single word? MC only contributed "tell me about you" to that supposed conversation. No, it was just ML talking at MC. And then bang, time for smut? What did this accomplish beyond telling us readers what we already knew? All this does was add to ML's "dark broody past" to give reason to him treating MC as less than.
"Big bad ML is rich and strong and has a dark past. Money and expectations are hard. He's only cold because he was raised to be that way." Is an understood character setting for ML since the beginning of the story. Why tell us again with 0 pay off? It just seems so pointless, in my opinion, to have this brought up and MC contribute absolutely nothing to the convo. What did he actually learn?! That he once tried to see his mom? That's uh, sad and all, but what does it have to do with their relationship? Nothing. It confirms what we and MC have been shown since the beginning.
Not to say this is terrible! It's not my personal preference of pacing. I don't like any of the characters as they all feel very one note. Maybe this is a super slow burn and I am impatient. Maybe this is just smut focused and the development will be nonexistent, consisting of a mere half hearted apology followed by copious sex. Both are valid forms of media. Juuuust not what I expected out of this one.
I wanted to like this. I kept thinking it would get better. There was potential here, after all. I enjoyed the concept, premise, and art...
But the plot just left me skipping pages out of annoyance, just to force myself to read it- telling myself I needed to give it a fair chance. Miscommunication plots are always uncomfortable, so I hoped the way it was portrayed would at least feel satisfying.
It doesn't. I instead found myself disliking the characters more and more as time went on. It felt utterly frustrating.
The entire reason MC has a bodyguard is because of stalker that has been able to get close, and can easily enter entertainment spaces. ML is supposed to be a top tier bodyguard, and just one member of a team assigned to MC.
Yet MC is alone without rhyme or reason for the sake of plot. They make a big to-do about him being followed 24/7. And then... he's alone in a huge venue that is teeming with people? As in, staff members of a foreign country he has no familiarity with. Why on earth would he be left alone in a space that is specifically one you should be on high alert? Specifically after a show when the clean up crews are bustling about and the stage is being broken down? When oodles of contract workers are about? Even without a stalker... this is just bad security. But it's done to have a cliche moment. Disappointing, because it would have been so easy to add 2 panels to make it look like he was alone on purpose and not "I dunno, I think he's on the stage?" Like some lazy babysitter. XD
There is just so much that is frustrating for no reason. So many instincts of... this could be solved by simply saying something. Not saying something here doesn't make sense based on the character they created. :S It's like he is only smart about things until they need to set up a rescue scenario. It's less what happened and how it was handled.
I left feeling it wasn't believable MC is an idol nor ML a bodyguard. And his staff? They are like highschool friends, not professionals. This doesn't feel like an idol story to me. :S
The pacing of this story is really.... dragging. It's to the point that I can't remember the last chapter that didn't feel like filler. By a few chapters in, only one sentence per chapter has any sort of impact on the story and the rest is just rehashing what we know.
It's the sort of pacing that makes me feel like we were supposed to be seeing 2 POVs, with 1 furthering the plot and the other filling it out. What we got was only the 2nd pov that offers fluff. It's like things are going on behind the scenes and we are meant to see it as intriguing, but with the lack of any depth to the main story it instead feels hollow.
It's like things happen to and around MC and we see his reactions. We don't see him actually prepare, plan or do anything. Even when it comes to thinking his mind is one track and circles to the same things. He doesn't personally push the story forward. It's more like he's along for the ride and we are watching the fallout.
I do like the concept, art and think the dialog is written well. It's just the pacing and placement of content that kills the heartbeat here for me. I would give it a try as a novel, since I feel like most of what is missing would be easier to convey.
I'm venting- not saying I dislike the story in any way. I'm only miffed because I do enjoy it, so please don't take this as me bashing it!
Whhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhy would MC here behave in such a stupid way. I mean, honestly. This makes 0 sense.
He specifically thinks about evidence, not startling the fella and approaching this wisely. He has heavy suspicions about this guy to the point he is concerned enough to consider entering his home. He is clearly not the type to act first think later...
And then he agrees to be alone in a closed space without informing anyone - with the guy he suspects? The guy gives him an off feeling yet he goes along with it like some dopey puppy. It's so weird. Especially since MC then notices again how weird guy is being, and just like... shrugs it off? This whole interaction is just so weirdly paced.
Offers to help the next day, is turned down. Then guy is suddenly like, actually you can help me- let's do it now? That's not weird? Like really? Even in different circumstances that is hella weird. Dude suddenly arrives home, you haven't seen him in days and he admits to being gone- and then within him getting home, despite not expecting you, he's ready to pack? Like that just makes no sense.
And then he frigging whips out his camera as he essentially scoops in front of this guy?! I'm sorry, but where did his awareness go? Where is the guy who was alert enough to realize this guy is a weirdo in the first place?
I just... if I type out step by step what happened in this chapter it drives me bonkers. I do not get it and it was just so unexpected. I'm irrationally irked.
But in the way where you yell at a TV during a movie. I'm not saying it's bad, since clearly I was invested enough to get miffed at this.
Yeppp, valid point! I was thinking he could've done better than that too. Aside from that, this is a really good bl storyyy
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This story had a good concept but poor execution. It feels disjointed and decides to focus on all the wrong areas. The end is a prime example- it spends a lengthy time tying up a subplot, and then a handful of panels on the main couple. :S
Set up and no delivery.
Everything that is introduced is treated like a thruway line, brought back only when needed.