OnePageMoar want to read (All 254)
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Feels like this should have remained a novel. That, or a looottt more time needed to go into the pacing of this webcomic. It feels like everything happens so very quickly in a disjointed manner.
Things don't have time to take hold. I find myself wondering "what is happening?" only for the scene to drastically shift again and leave me lost.
Chapter 17 should have been split into multiple chapters. You can't have a "plot shifting" important series of events all take place within 1 chapter and expect it to feel satisfying! By chapter 18 I felt like I'd been bamboozled.
This has the bones of an interesting read. Unfortunately it doesn't deliver.
I agree fella needs to be punished.
However... this was not the right way. XD This is how you CREATE an antagonist! Fella was loyal enough to leave and vow his silence, refusing money in an attempt to show it. His anger was directed at himself failing at that point.
But then ML just had to go and give this guy a reason to want revenge on him? To have hostility towards the wizard?! Seems like a bad move.
Like punish him and strip his memory. If you can remove his peen you can remove/muddle with his memory.
Maybe I'm just paranoid. Or maybe he did that and we just weren't shown it.
Hey he didn’t get killed. Be glad he bottom magic done instead lmaoooooooooooo
If he got killed it would be preferable, as then he wouldn't have the opportunity to harbor resentment. I was more concerned that he just created seeds for this guy to want revenge.
It’s a webcomic let the author have some fun.
It's a webcomic let the reader have opinions.
Usually, this is the seed to a side couple and a sign that he's gonna be the next bottom, dunno though
I can see how someone would feel that way!
To me, leaving him excommunicated is a more logical door for side-couple. He has all the key factors needed: showed interest in men, heartbroken, in need of a place to belong, and previously devoted. Him being won over by a uke, accepting his lingering feelings towards MC are admiration, and then settling down content.
The way it went leans more towards creating a villain who will show back up. I get the vibe MC will be pushed to kill him at some point. (Or let ML kill him, or feel torn that ML had to kill him.) Gives me more "plot device" and less "spin off."
BUT, I am by no means trying to say "you're wrong," just sharing my take. I can definitely see how there could still be spin-off potential, it's just not where my mind instantly went.