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It honestly was so cute until the fourth chapter. If it stopped there I honestly wouldn't have anything to say other than "wow, that was nice!"
The thing that really turned me off was the fact that I honestly didn't see any interesting from the ML to the MC. That left me with quite a lot of questions about their relationship: Did the ML love the MC, or did he saw him as a push over friend with benefits? After the fight we dont see any really major sadness about the fact that they won't see each other, especially from the ML, did he really didn’t care about our MC? If the MC didn’t come with the baby, would the ML send him off? Did the ML find the "family" more in the baby, rather than MC? Would there be a difference, if the ML found the baby at his doorstep without the MC?
I also just felt more of an interest in the sexual aspect more from the MC (if not the dick comment (which, again, the ML didn’t answer the MC when he asked if that's the only thing he loves about him). I just felt like a lot of the sex was mostly one-sided.
I think it could've been done better if the author added a little more inner monolog (which I honestly was expecting) but oh well.