hhahaha instead of just dragging these characters personalities so far i forget their original ones maybe an epilogue should be made
okay the weird ending of the first one was bad enough, the even weirder random basically plotless porn in the second one was worse, and the rape followed with a “second chance” in the third one really topped it off for me… jesus christ
I honestly don't understand the majority of people complaining. It looks like people just want to be salty.
These are short stories, there isn't enough time to develop deep plots. Also keep in mind this is the first work of this author, way before Low Tide in Twilight. In the author's note, the author says they didn't want to create anything plot-heavy. Despite that, I think the ending of the first story was good. There were plenty of clues that Seere was going to die and anyone who claims otherwise wasn't reading it attentively. The second was just a fun fuck-fest. It is *not* supposed to have a plot, and I thought it was really funny. The third one is incomplete. Again, the author says they didn't have enough time to write the story they wanted before publication and just cut the story short. Also, the story ends with the top begging for forgiveness, it doesn't show weather the bottom forgave him or not.
Yeah there isn't enough time to develop deep roots, but if your short story isn't cohesive and doesn't make sense, than you still failed at making a good short story. Everything else is your personal opinion, everyone else can critique or react how they want
I could say the same thing to you, it's just your opinion. You say it isn't cohesive and doesn't make sense. How? I don't believe we read the same stories then.
i can understand this for the second one, but as i stated in the original comment, i think the ending of the first story soured the original good feelings i bad about it due to just how unnecessary it was. it could just have ended at the vampire disappearing. in the third one, i think it could have ended as a undeveloped short story with lackluster character WITHOUT a rape scene. the scene where the seme drags the uke to the stall before attempting to rape him was very unnecessary, especially considering the fact the author would not be able to create a chasing/redemption arc for the seme due to the lack of chapters (since its a short story) because of that weird apology being the ending, the last story fell flat.
tldr;
i literally said or at least meant in my comment the first story would have been good WITHOUT the ending this would not have required “time to develop deep plots”
opinion makes sense for second story
i literally said/implied my comment i didnt like the rape. i still stand by that! wasnt needed, especially if the author knew they wouldnt have enough chapters to create a proper redemption !
wait i just realized i only said weird ending ab the first story in my original comment. ignore fhat part of the tldr then oops!
the tits not being sized proportionally to the rest of his body is bothering me so much but BESIDES THAT…….. NATSUKI…… Σ( ￣□￣||)
HAPPY TO SEE KARYAN !!!!! ITS BEEN A WHILE but also whys ilya casually telling jerry hes having dreams ab him thats crazy
him turning the sensation all the way down to 0 all the time is so dangerous … he could break his arm and wouldnt even notice ….
its okay! you just become very flexible without feeling pain
WHAT NOOOO I WANTED TO SEE MORE OF DAWOOL AND EDEN I NEEEEEEEEEEED A SPINOFF……
all i could think reading is ab how much this reminds me of the mafia stuff i read on wattpad in 2019-2020 LOLLLLL