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Personally, in comparison to other stories, I'll give this a 9.0, and I would say I'm generous considering I'm about to drop it, I'm just staying to see the ending.
The beginning of the story was interesting, but it started going downhill from when snake boy was introduced. Snake boy is like the equivalent of those jealous bitchy side girls you see in mangas - possessive, narcissistic, childish and complete deadweight. "Why do you not like me like how you like them? If I get rid of them I'll have you all to myself!" It's not even a one time thing, it's literally his ENTIRE personality. AND every single choice he has made only served to inconvenience mc or put her in danger. Most infuriating part is how mc forgives him every time he tries to kill ml. I'm really sick of hearing the "he is snake, basically 10 y/o, dk human rules" excuse anymore.
Also why are all the adults and elders in the story dumber than a 20 y/o girl? If you alr know the war is instigated by a malicious third party why would you continue to do what they want? And as the story goes on, you would observe that literally no one other than mc helps to solve problems. Mc has to literally do everything herself. Solve this asura problem, solve that misunderstanding, get rid of this enemy, identify that enemy, and when she gets into danger boom father/ml appears to save the day. This is mostly criticism of the author themselves, coz they probably wanted mc to sound smart, but the "logic" given by mc is literally so common sense that it just makes everyone else seem dumb. Either that or it's plot armour, like how the original novel coincidentally wrote about the centipedes. The story is also extremely predictable, I saw the "mc dad didn't kill ml dad" plot twist from miles away. This is like Wattpad level of plot writing, aka even 14 y/os can write this shit.
Disclaimer, I'm NOT saying this isn't a good story, it has its merits but DEFINITELY not a 9.5. It's ridiculous how high this is rated but other, more well written stories get a 9.1.