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This is cute, but very superficial and generic.
They create a dramatic scene who could take it to a interesting twist, but resolve/just rush past it in the next slide. Also, reutilize a lot of scenes for flashbacks, like the stabbing incident, give us some new art/perspective!
The characters are also too 2d, not very deep in characterization and the history is basically about Doha, like, ik the actual MC is very mundane and boring, but at least give him a scene where he isn't talking/thinking about Doha.
I'm sure the author will probably try to "fix" some gap holes in the ending in a rushed form, just so they can draw them having sex again.