An older MC, but even at 38 acting like an irresponsible teenager. Like, why is it such a struggle to write ukes with fully developed frontal lobes? Why must they always have the mentality of someone just going through puberty?
If chapter 47 isn’t him calling his mother out for being such a massive piece of shit and cutting ties with her, you can throw the whole man away. Also chapter 46 having FL physically SAY the ML is a good person felt like a forced cop out by the author bc we had been shown NOTHING to imply he was a good husband for her. He let his parents treat her worse than a servant and did nothing so support her during that time. He just existed without being actively abusive… but didn’t stand up to his parents who were actively abusive. Also they keep trying to paint the father like he’s not as bad as the mother. But the father views women as second class citizens, like they’re nothing but servants and baby makers to him. “Maybe my father not hitting me and just ignoring me during tough times is his way of showing affection?” Boy shut up. The father is trash. The mother is trash. And the son is a spineless worm.
I’m not completely against any form of rape in fiction (I hold Back to School as the gold standard in BL on how it can be handled well), but that in this particular story, it comes out of nowhere and is completely irrelevant to the characters and plot. It’s barely an after thought and the RAPE is going to never be properly addressed. You can tell by how nonchalantly the chapters afterward treated it. The only thing that’s being taken seriously is the drug use, and just my opinion, but I don’t think drugs are worse than rape. This rape was, like many others, was just a cheap ploy for the leads to bang early without any actual effort writing wise. Hate sex is a thing! You can have consensual hate sex if the authors want violent sex so badly, it just takes a little more work to get there. Buh.
So long is there some proper realization of feelings and the seme genuinely regrets how he fucked up and works to not be such a douche anymore, then this could have a decent end. Just have to wait and see.
Is for the seme to learn uke’s past and at least understand why he’s so reluctant and maybe even start working his kinks around/accounting for the uke’s trauma… not that I should expect anything from a guy who uses his position of workplace authority over the uke to coarse him into very unwanted sex.
For a split second I actually thought the uke was going to handle the driver and show he’s at least competent at his job when he tries. NOPE. Still just a pushover with no brain and definitely no backbone. It’s a pain reading about someone so pathetic, but I keep coming back thinking he’s FINALLY woken up and decided to actually tell the seme off but nah. At this point the seme and uke deserve each other, if only so no one else will have to suffer their company. (Uke might as well be a particularly dumb toddler for all the mental fortitude he shows)
It bothers me, just a nitpick, that Shingun didn’t figure out Jake’s identity on his own. There were several conversations about Shingun trying to put them on similar levels information wise, showed multiple scenes with his informant contact, built up the hackers getting serious on his side, all for the revelation to be given to him. Like Jake’s identity just stares him in the face, it’s nothing HE does to figure it out. It’s all circumstance.
I like Shingun, I do, definitely one of my favorite BL MC’s, but… he doesn’t beat the typical damsel in distress allegations. He always needs saving in the end and he never even gets close to equal footing as Jake. This is just my one nitpick in the story. Doesn’t ruin it for me, just wish this one element could have been addressed or handled better.
They’re going to do something when it’s time for him to be released that extends his time. Hopefully that’s enough for him to snap, even better if it’s timed with him learning they set up the whole gang rape scenario that got him to accept their deal in the first place. There’s no way Uke isn’t going to try to kill himself at least once.
Being the single parent to a manchild is draining, there’s no way the uke holds out longer than 6 months.
He could have thought up to save her, he landed on “I have to rape the woman I love multiple times and tell her nothing.” Like, yeah okay buddy, I’m sure that’s the ONLY WAY she could have been saved. The way that lets you sleep with the person you’ve wanted for multiple lifetimes now. How convenient.
If the vampire really did kill a CHILD in the beginning, then the author has done a good job making it so a lot of readers won’t care how horribly he’s treated in future chapters. If it’s never brought up again I’ll assume the child died, but there’s still room to see. But if he did then, my dislike of rape in stories suddenly vanishes when it’s happening to a child murderer. A purely fictional narrative take.
With the abuse escalating as it was and ML being know to murder for fun… we all know within a year or so he’s likely going to kill MC. Probably during sex gone too far. Like there is only 1 way this ends for MC now and it’s with a premature death.
My problem is this was just 7 chapters of watching a guy get tortured. It ends where it began. So you read chapter 1 and you’ve basically gotten the entire experience, which I think is a failure of writing. This isn’t psychological or horror, it’s actual, literal, by definition torture porn. Which fine if that’s your kink, I just think writing wise this was poorly executed and a waste of time.
The rape in the beginning ruins the whole thing. And it was SO unnecessary. It’s never brought up again, there are no consequences. Like it just happens and the story moves on. It’s treating rape like a rough handshake. But it ruins the “sweet” ML everyone loves because it means at his core he’s a rapist who sees nothing wrong with rape. Why do yaoi always do this with ML they don’t want to be seen as evil? Like unless you’re intentionally writing a toxic ML who is meant to be toxic and that’s a plot point of the story, why rape? Just feels like the editor said “we need a sex scene in the beginning” so they just threw it in to get it out of the way.
That the boss being a shit boss who oversteps bounds and abuses his authority to make secretary do jobs outside of his duties, even so far as taking care of the boss at home, gets brought up. Very worried they’re going to skip over the abuse of power and go straight to the secretary doing damage control bc he was caught planning to (kind of dropped) backstab said awful boss. Got my finger crossed bc if the secretary is the only one who has to apologize I’ll consider this a flop story wise (but still great smut).
About a man who is gaslit by everyone around him to think he’s wrong and crazy as his autonomy is slowly stripped away. Mother sells you to the royal family, collects checks you’ve never seen a scent of, and lies about your gender? It was for your own good and you’re ungrateful. What do you mean not knowing put you at risk? THAT’s why the royal family said they would protect you… from the harm and media storm THEY cause. He’s obviously not being rational about this.
He wants to stay in college and not get pregnant? Is he crazy? That’s a selfish thing to do, he’s not even thinking about how that would make the fiancé he just met feel or the danger he would be in… because of the lies and said fiancé. He’s clearly not thinking rational since becoming an omega. Hopefully spousal training, preparing him for his wifely duties will set him straight.
For now he can be indulged and allowed to go to college. Just until he gets pregnant of course, which will be soon obviously. What a crazy guy, not even considering how his fiancé feels about him getting an education or that could impact his true future career. Baby maker.
The art is so sketchy and unfinished I wondered if this was a beta test before the official release.
This art shows that if you want to make a webcomic, just do it. Not good at art or comic paneling? Doesn’t matter. The only thing stopping you is YOU. Who needs talent when you have ~passion~