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3 simple changes and this would easily be as successful as BJ Alex on here:
1) Instead of Dan being a lovesick, docile puppy, make him strong willed & hot blooded while still being cute around the one he loves, but he doesn't want to get treated bad and kinda argues back, teasing JK
2) Make JK less abusive, he can be a scary looking Top with an attitude but give him occasional sweetheart moments like blushing when Dan does something to provoke him and treating him somewhat special (not just as any other hole he gets to fuck for his jinx)
You can also include comedic moments and shift their dynamic from meek Dan x abusive JK to feisty Dan x annoyed but oddly fond of Dan JK
This would improve their interactions SO MUCH
3) Give them teasing moments, sexy snippets, not every intimate action needs to be all the way sex!!
I just read "2020" HIGHLY recommend, it's a 10/10 and does exactly this! They made out in front of the fridge (nipple play & kissing), Top fondled bottom while he was studying and stopped.
This would be spicy!! Develop their intimate interaction too!! Make it look like JK is into Dan while being dishonest at first and make Dan slightly hesitant but slowly falling for JK's antics
The rest can stay the same & this would easily be a 9-10/10!
Anyway just felt like writing this after reading 2020 just now, if you read that far, check out that Manhwa and come back....or don't, thanks for reading either way :)