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She has all the potential to be a strong female lead, but the only person she seems to be able to defy is herself (or Evelina). She's constantly making the wrong choices, and digging herself even deeper into situations, like how she tries to diffuse situations but always ends up saying it doing something that aggravates the enemy. And the one guy who could've saved her from losing all your powers literally gave up trying because it hurt her one time, and then when she loses all her magic he contemplates leaving her even tho it was HIS FAULT she ended up like that in the first place literally the entire reason the contract was made with aslan was so hed get rid of the mark on her thigh but he never even attempts to after their first encounter. He knew was the mark did so wtf?? And ik the male leads falling in love with her is kinda random and forced, but how'd she fall in love with all of THEM?? She was convinced the knight hated her but as soon as he showed any interest she reciprocated. And the same thing goes for the Leon and Aslan, she didn't acknowledge of like them until they started liking her. The writing is very sloppy even outside of romance, like how did the evil priest become the high priest even tho he was under arrest? Every priest trusts him with their lives even after witnessing him being arrested for possession of magic. I would say maybe the priests are under a spell of hypnosis but nothing so far would suggest that to be the case. The plot had potential but the writing kinda ruins it. I could go on forever probably