Lemon Cutie December 10, 2020 7:33 am

I just wrote a little something and intend on expanding on it,, can someone read it and tell me their thoughts? Its divided into 2 chapters.

Chapter One; The Awakening

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A sound rang throughout a room, a normal thing for Number 12. Everyday she awoke to the exact same buzzing sound.. It never changed. It remained the same. A low hum that bothered her ears everyday.. The girl tightened her eyes as she did not want to awake just yet. Suddenly, a man's voice echoed through the halls. A loud announcement that happened every morning.
“It is now 7;00 am in the morning. Get up and out of your dormitories”
Same old announcement as always. Number 12 opening her eyes, her pale blue eyes stared up at the Navajo white walls. Then she rose from her bed, the bed creaked as she made the smallest movement.. Everything in the room was white, the bedside table, the sheets to her bed, her slippers. It was like living in a void of white. The only color that remained was the pitch black bed frame of her awfully noisey bed. The black and white haired girl got up and made her way to the door, opening it up to reveal more white walls, some more of the other creatures were out as well “Creatures'' was what they were described as. They were a wide span of these “creatures”. All of them had a species, or a group to fit into. There were fairies, werewolves, vampires, demons, whatever a person may possibly think of were thrown into this plain white hell. Number 12, was divided into an ice sub category of this.
Number 12 made her way down to the cafeteria, these walls that kept on going. Everyday it felt like a walk straight to hell. She got her normal breakfast. Oatmeal with a side of water 12 walked over to wear and she normally sat, in a rounded table in the very back of the cafeteria with another creature.. Number 78. 78 was a special cause, he was divided up into the “demons” category. No one knew what he specifically was, but everyone knew he was terrifying. His pitch black eyes that were only seen when he decided to move his long shaggy bang out of the way. Many say those eyes will show you your worst fear, some say scientists and other creatures have gone insane just staring into them. 12 wouldn't know, she never did see them as 78 would always keep them covered.
“So.. icey” 78 spoke up. “Did you sleep well?” he asked in a hushed tone of voice. He picked at the distasteful oatmeal with a spoon. 12 shrugged. How would she know the difference between good and bad? The only thing she ever felt was despair. She never raised her expectations for things for that exact reason as well. 78 huffed.
“Could ya atleast lie to me and say ya slept well?” 78 picked up the glassof water and took a short sip.
Tick
Tick
Tick.
The damned clock always seemd to be louder then 12s thoughts. She looked up then down at her snow white hands that seemed to be frosting over at the tips of them.
“I slept just fine” she replied in a gentle tone of voice.
Just as she finished her that sentence a familiar voice echoed through the speakers once again.

“Number 12,Please Report to lab 7.”


Chapter 2; The File


ID NUMBER; 12
BIRTH DATE ; 21 - JULY - 1999
SEX ; F
CATEGORY; N/A
SUBCATEGORY ; ICE


12 stared at the file at the desk and stared up. There sat what the creatures called “Dr. Despair” as he would run inhumane tests on the to see their “limits” his real name was Dr. Lawrence Allen..
“Do you know what this is?” he asked, this was only a single page of her file, the introduction she assumed. She knew her file held more information then just this, it had statistics of her health and how shes doing in tests but other then that. Nothing she doesnt already knows.
“I do” she said calmly. She always acted calm in front of him, as he took any other voice or attitude as disrespect and 12 wasnt up to one of his severe punishments.
“Good” Dr.Allen said as he walk over to a surgery table. “Your going to have a procedure done in a couple of minutes. You’ve been selected for a special program.” He turned and smiled at her. Special program? She thought. What can be worse then eating the same tasteless oatmeal everyday? 12 nodded in response. “This special program lets you.. Explore the outside world, outside these plain white walls.” He countiuned. 12 practically snapped her head up. Outside? SHes never gone outside.. Shes read books about the animals, plants, and land but she’d never seen it outside of pictures. To 12, this was such a big honor. She may even be able to see the snow, something shes always wanted to see. Just as she opened her mouth to speak a nurse came in with a tray. “We are ready.” the woman said.
When instructed, she laid down on the surgery table. A mask was put on her face and within seconds.. 12 closed her eyes.

    Idkwts December 10, 2020 7:57 am

    Idkwts tbh........I would too like to know what happens later in the future like (sorry I already forgot if it said where they were) where they are at, why do they have code names........., what's the purpose and why, and how did it all happen, or describe more of where they are or why they got put in categories or how did they end up in that white hell.........idk (≧∀≦)

    Idkwts December 10, 2020 8:25 am
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    Ok

    Lemon Cutie December 10, 2020 2:53 pm
    Idkwts tbh........I would too like to know what happens later in the future like (sorry I already forgot if it said where they were) where they are at, why do they have code names........., what's the purpose a... Idkwts

    i was thinking of fleshing it out somewhat in a later chapter, since this is from 12s point of view, she wouldnt know how they got there just yet.

    Lemon Cutie December 10, 2020 9:18 pm
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    yea,, if your intrested in chaper 3 i have it posted on in the my experineces tab on my homepag! just if you want to keep reading

    Lemon Cutie December 10, 2020 9:27 pm
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    I apperciate your opinion. You've gained a laugh out of me today. Thanks love. <3

    Lemon Cutie December 11, 2020 1:25 am
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    Thanks i guess OSDJEIFJF ALSO i have updated the story! if you wanna read it,, its int eh my experiences tabs

    Lemon Cutie December 11, 2020 1:40 am
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    FEIEJFIEFJF E I hope you liek it! i have chapter 4 on the way soon!! just bare with me gfhesrlgiu

Lemon_Girl December 4, 2020 6:44 pm

sorry guys!! im on a journey on finding my friend who i told my username wrong to, her user may be marionette duplicate if you see her comment on any of your shit please direct her to me. shes stupid.

    Lemon Cutie December 4, 2020 6:47 pm

    Should ave told her to follow me on pintrest this is actually ridiculous. im SO DUMB I HAVE LIKE NO BRAINCELLS LEFT HAN IM SORRY

    Lemon Cutie December 4, 2020 6:49 pm

    Me refreshing my page every 5 seconds to see if she found me;

    Lemon Cutie December 4, 2020 6:51 pm

    Nvm found her stupid ass on pintrest

    truck kun take me~~~ December 4, 2020 6:52 pm

    That's sad~~hope you find both your brain cells and friend~~ヾ(❀╹◡╹)ノ~

Lemon_Girl December 4, 2020 6:42 pm

SEND ME NATE PICTURES PLEASE I HAVE A FETISH

Lemon_Girl November 30, 2020 5:40 am

Idk man im lonely, just want friends i can goof off with and share my favorite manhwa with, Mail me if interested i guess?

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    i'm a loner so i'll be your friend :)

    Lemon_Girl November 30, 2020 5:44 am
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    id love to be friends with you too!!!

    Lemon_Girl November 30, 2020 5:44 am
    i'm a loner so i'll be your friend :) yetimonster101

    Periodt!!

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Lemon_Girl November 30, 2020 5:15 am

Rapist or not?
I say yes because the first time he "helped out" he literally screwed hyesung when he was in a unconsenting state, and that chapter where Hye sung was masturbating and dojin ACTUALLY forces himself onto Hye sung.

I personally fell just because hes "attractive" he shouldnt be excused of this.

    ✨Suujin November 30, 2020 5:28 am

    Yup he's a rapist

    suofei_ November 30, 2020 5:29 am

    definitely a rapist

    yeah no November 30, 2020 5:33 am

    Yes, as much as I like him, I still think he should be held accountable. I do believe the masturbating incident was SLIGHTY more borderline, but I also think it was not okay. Also, the time where he decides he cannot fuck the omega he brought home and Hyesung was left crying COMPLETELY disgusted me.

    Lemon_Girl November 30, 2020 5:36 am
    Yes, as much as I like him, I still think he should be held accountable. I do believe the masturbating incident was SLIGHTY more borderline, but I also think it was not okay. Also, the time where he decides he ... yeah no

    Girl he literally commited rape in that moment it isnt "borderline" it IS rape- also that part where he knowingly brings someone else home when he has his PREGNANT omega at home was fucking gross.

    Lemon_Girl November 30, 2020 5:43 am
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    I feel like most readers looked past his actions due to him being handsome, i feel Hye-sung mostly stayed with him because of byul, the bond, and the pure fact that Dojins rich.

    Lemon_Girl November 30, 2020 5:50 am
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    Theres so many examples of shitty tops and people excusing their actions cause hes "fine" like fuck, i can name maybe 4?
    Dojin, Seungho, Sangwoo, Jiwon (he got better but still what he did to DG was shitty)

    Lemon_Girl November 30, 2020 5:58 am
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    I feel more of the tiktok girls started to fetishized killing stalkings, idk thats just what i feel, fjbgfwlrheg.

    Lemon_Girl November 30, 2020 6:10 am
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    To sum it up, they all want sangwoo to lock them in his basement.

    yeah no November 30, 2020 9:49 pm
    Girl he literally commited rape in that moment it isnt "borderline" it IS rape- also that part where he knowingly brings someone else home when he has his PREGNANT omega at home was fucking gross. Lemon_Girl

    Yeah, you’re right. I’m sorry, borderline shouldn’t even be used when referring to a rape situation, my apologies I wasn’t thinking straight

    Lemon_Girl November 30, 2020 10:29 pm
    Yeah, you’re right. I’m sorry, borderline shouldn’t even be used when referring to a rape situation, my apologies I wasn’t thinking straight yeah no

    its okay!! maybe try to word it better next time?

Lemon_Girl November 23, 2020 9:49 pm

How did yall feel about this?

Personally i think this was just some sort of Plot point the author skimmed over. I feel like 1/2 of the things hyesung has done would have probably been stopped if this one detail was in the story since the beginning. Just my thoughts though.

Share yours! id love to hear mulitple peoples opinion on this fact

    irgo November 23, 2020 9:59 pm

    I wish we could have seen him and his father met. Not a happy ending, just that the topic didn't end up in oblivion.

    Lemon_Girl November 23, 2020 10:06 pm
    I wish we could have seen him and his father met. Not a happy ending, just that the topic didn't end up in oblivion. irgo

    I believe this too, I personally believe that the topic wasnt touched on enough and everyone just went on their mery way, child abuse probably isnt a topic to mention and just forget about.

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