Salem Saberhagen want to read (All 343)
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The concept was good
The execution however was lacking.
You have a buff smokeshow and a petite woman- that's the kind of pairing that could drive people mad, in a GOOD WAY
It would have been better if they could have more meaningful conversations. Maybe start off with him being hard on her in the gym, and pushing her to work out some body parts more. With him sounding stern, and her taking it to heart. Then with better communication get to know each other. Maybe also have him talk about some insecurities he might have with his own looks or otherwise.
The sex scene was also a missed opportunity. Have them both be eager but also shy and timid. Her being worried to undress in front of him, lest she turns him off. And him reassuring her that is not the case. That he is more than willing.
More attention to foreplay, especially with her breasts- longer and more detailed nipple play. Get her off with her nips only. This is important since the ex pointed out her flat chest was a turn off.
And THEN get to penetrative sex and her worrying about being so small and tight, and that being even more exhilarating because of the size difference.
Later chapters can have more dynamic sex scenes.
Anyway, a huge missed opportunity with this one-shot
Hey, can some one please tell me, did mangago remove Make Me Bark from the site
And any alternate places i could read it
Mangarock
Mangago removed Make me Bark due to copyright issues. http://mangahasu.com/make-me-bark-v1-p28582.html
Thanks!
Thank you!
Translation quality is not good.
Apart from that, she was staying at a hotel.
So why couldn't she just order room service? You're in an unfamiliar city, there was no need to go out at night.
Just order room service. Shi Yan's footing the bill anyway.
She's just trying to whine and get shi yan attention